Merit

thoughts...

Perhaps it was at that very moment

In a circle of friends and colleagues

Just drunk enough

At a time good enough

You decided to throw caution over your shoulder

Just a simple comment

That caused my tongue to tumble

Battering in vain against the back of my teeth

And all that could be heard

Was the awkward laugh trapped in my throat

Maybe all those faux invitations to coffee

Somehow became a possible reality

And all I can think is that I hate the stuff

I'll never enjoy hot bean water

But I'll drink it with you

How glad I was when you decided you were good enough

To take a chance on one who may not enjoy coffee

But whom the sun shines just as brightly

As it does on you

And hopes that it does on all others

When we are sitting across from each other

At a café surrounded by strangers

You with coffee and I with (possibly) one as well

We will exclaim about each others merits

As to the very reason we came to this outcome

Author's Note

All reviews and criticisms welcome

Reviews

[Mai L Nissen]

Is this a real situation or an imagined?

I really enjoyed reading it regardless. There are many great descriptions that worked beautifully and made me smile :) I LOVED the second stanza, great description! Overall it is really well written, there are many phrases expressed beautifully and you really capture the reactions and the thoughts of the speaker so on point.
This bit made me chuckle:
"You with coffee and I with (possibly) one as well"

Thank you for sharing :)

[James O'Rourke]

Hey Mai!

So this poem is mostly truth. I had a friend that I had been trying to go on a date with me for a while. It had been such a long time that I eventually asked her out for coffee instead of a date. She immediately called me on my bullshit. She knew I couldn't stand coffee. So it became a sort of joke between us. Every time I saw her I told her I was determined to get that cup of coffee with her.

Anyway, the imaginary portions were the last two stanzas. I imagined what would have happened were she to say yes without the prior knowledge of my hatred of coffee.

Nothing really complicated or dense in this piece. Just a really simple one for me. Thought it'd be an entertaining little story. I'm glad you found it to be so. As always, thank you for taking the time to check out some of my stuff. Till next time!