Peace

Some image play. Trying to be a little more descriptive with my writing while evoking emotions.

Only within a deep dark can it be found

Hidden among the scattered piles

Of paper and beer bottles

The cigarette butts holding voice

Just above a whisper

The girl on her side breathing softly

A curl of love between her lips

It's in the cat's patience

As it eyes unsuspecting toes

The rocking chair lilting

Back and forth with the moon's rise and fall

The settling of a tea kettle

Lifted off the heat

It's in the first peach of July

The juice, the pulp, the pit

Leaves dancing in the fall

Celebrating a summer well lived

Watching you lay in the winter

And rise and stretch in the spring

Author's Note

All criticisms and reviews are welcome as always. Let me know if any particular line stands out as good or may need working. Thanks for reading everyone!

Reviews

[Mai L Nissen]

I really like the images you conjure! What a lovely journey, presented with peace in many forms and places :)
I love the wording, the flow... The beginning intrigued me, and I was not sure were we'd end up! Though, excited I felt I was in safe hands!

Well, if I have to pick on something it would be this line: "It's in the cat's patience" or rather the "It's" bit. I think it is the transition from "A curl of love between her lips" to "It's in the cat's patience"
I would prefer: "you see/find it in the cat's patience!"
This is really just a personal preference. - "It's" works for me just fine in this sentence: "It's in the first peach of July"

However, I really enjoyed this poem! It might just have to go to the Favourite folder :D

[Jamestown]

This is great, the imagery is non stop, the wording is wonderful
and the message is solid! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[James O'Rourke]

Thanks James! I'm glad you liked it!