Divorce

just another attempt.

Family of rich

Family with meat

Living the life

Nothing to give

The perfect family

A lie

 

Family of love

Lies!

Family of five

Lies!

Family together

No.

Just another family

 

Divorced

Family of one

Each one for their self

There is no love

Only money

 

Kids with love

Kids with money

Where are you parents?

Kids alone

Lonely one

Left one

Only one

Strong one.

Author's Note

Hmm i dont know if this can even be considered a peom, but a review would be nice.

Reviews

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I have no authority on the subject, but so far as I know: if you call it a poem, it's a poem. That is especially true of contemporary poetry. Most of the poetry published in literary magazines these days seems like a bunch of random paragraphs telling random stories. No more rhyming or structure or cadence or alliteration or...

Your poem shows more experience than you're letting on:

Family of love
Lies!
Family of five
Lies!
Family together
No.

The togetherness of this family reaches a point where it can't even fool itself. The lies are so blatant that the illusion can't hold. The family finally breaks. Divorce follows. Where there was a deluded family of five, there is now:

Family of one
Each one for their self
There is no love
Only money

The cynicism of the whole situation is just sad. And then you follow the kids to see what effects the divorce has had on them:

Kids with love
Kids with money
Where are you parents?
Kids alone

They have money, but not the one thing money can't buy. And the thing they most need at that age and at that time of their lives. It's all very depressing. But you end it with a somewhat hopeful note:

Kids alone
Lonely one
Left one
Only one
Strong one.

That's as happy an ending as you can get from this story. You very ably illustrated the tale of a family's unraveling, from beginning to end. Well done. You obviously know what you're doing.