Television (Acrostic)

I and some 100 plus million people, spent so much time glued to the TV today that this piece inevitably made its way out.

Teeth clenched, grey matter seized in an orgy of colors

Explosive currents usurp the forgone laws of providence

Liberally corroding divine inspiration, precise as intended

Evolution regresses, oblivious to the flourishing malaise   

Voracity is dogma, while faith becomes a communal faux pas

Intrepid men, cowardly adhere to a doctrine of callousness

Subservient to despotism and erogenous mass appeal

Insecure dissidents unearth comfort in rudimentary diversion

Orchids wither under the burden of lonesome dejection

Nightingales descend from heaven, cursing why twitter at all.

February 1, 2015 - Rude Lizard  

Author's Note

This is my first attempt at an acrostic poem. Any feedback, harsh or not, is greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[Olivia]

this is such an awesome poem. intense and dark. nice work

[rudelizard]

Thank you Olivia. I was definitely coming from an intense and dark place. Glad you liked. I took a quick peek at your page. I am looking forward to reading your work. Cheers, and welcome to my page.

[~]

Well done!! Vivid and dark indeed the world you depicted.

[rudelizard]

As always, I am grateful for your review Moonskittles. After seeing all the commercials yesterday and propaganda on TV, I was clearly coming from a dark place. But, I'm a sucker for the matrix too, so I was a bit disgusted with myself. Thanks again, I am much obliged!!

[willweb]

I think you have a good grasp on the format. I like this one...it has an edgy feel and doesn't stray to far from the main word - Television.

[rudelizard]

Thanks Will. I was trying to convey the dark side of entertainment and mass media on Television. After reading it over dozens of times, I see a couple things I am thinking of changing. At least on the approach to future acrostic pieces. Thanks again for taking the time to review my poem.

[Marie]

It's a good acrostic; doing something with the word "television" must have been hard. I've never done an acrostic.

[rudelizard]

Thank you Marie. It was challenging but I tried to not over-think it. You should give it a shot. It was actually quite fun. Appreciate your feedback :)

[Marie]

I'll bet it is fun, and I enjoy doing things like that; I just haven't gotten around to it.