Wind of Silence

Winds snatch at the words I utter...

I know now, never will they ever reach your ears

 

“And when she breaks down and makes a sound,

you’ll never hear her” ~

 

Hollow and broken now, crumpled like a forgotten piece

just a page from the symphony of your life...

Like the silent notes on the piano score.

Written but not played, Silence…

 

 

 

 

 

Nothing, it’s just the wind

Imagination... Listen carefully.

Between the echoes of the past

and the echoes of your heart

Can you hear?

 

 

 

I... l.o..ve….you

 

Reviews

[ShadowWolf]

The memory of one who never knew of your love....a love (as it is with the formatting) fading away.
This is very good!

[Rambling Prose]

I love the structure of this piece, as well as the imagery you've painted, it's beautiful. I especially love that you made the second stanza barely noticeable, like words spoken but never heard - the last line finished it up quite nicely...

Nicely done...

[Vatsayayana]

Ooooooo... ~shudders~
This has a sad, haunting quality to it. How heart-wrenching. Another sheet of beautiful exquisite music, never to be played. Never do the fingers of life strum its passion or an angel's voice to sing its words.
~shaking head~
Beautifully done. You've pulled a heart chord or two within me.
Your imagery is flawless and I love the symbolism here.
Well done!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really a brilliant piece..Beautifully written.
I liked the flow a lot because I was literally flowing with the write.
What I loved most about the piece is this simile-
"Like the silent notes on the piano score.
Written but not played, Silence�"
One of the best I've ever read so far!
It somehow briefed your feel and made the reader (at least me) to stop reading for a while and to think about the writer and the beautiful usage of simile.

A very intriguing piece right up from the start!
And I loved it :)

[LizLadyNinja]

This is neat. But chaotic. I really like how you did the "fade" thing with your writing. But your wording seems kind of strange to me. And for me, it didn't flow as smoothly as it could have. Never the less, it is an interesting idea that you executed very well.

Thanks for sharing!

[EliJoLee]

woww. i really like this one.

how it goes from vivid to fading.

very well written.

i love the description u used. makes you keep reading it.
swell work!