Palpitating Emotions

 

Palpitating emotions converging in the atmosphere

Which feels like heaven itself between us

The dawning of the unknown

Spilling forth from our lips

Like a glittering waterfall of gold

Ready to betray us

Reviews

[Legion]

Love the rush in this. And the unknown feeling with it all. Great word usage as well.

[wordfiend]

I love this. Nice imagery. Nice form. The only thing that didn't quite work for me (and this is a little thing) was "heaven itself." The word heaven is okay but "itself" seem a little flat compared to the rest of it.