All Sales Final

All Sales Final

A Poem by rubie

All Sales Final

 

 

skin on skin

lies on lies

you once loved me

or did you?

was I just a pillow

for your greedy head?

 

I was too wrapped up in the illusion

to see that inside the gift

another box waited to be opened

 

go peddle your wares somewhere else

shower another with your deceit

I no longer accept returns

without a receipt

© 2013 rubie


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apparently, you have never heard of the walmart return policy....they'll refund you for anything, even if you didn't buy it there! all kidding aside though, i felt this one deeply, having been down that gloomy path to selfish and unreturned love. nicely penned.

Posted 11 Years Ago


quinfinn

11 Years Ago

anytime. if you don't hear from me you may always send me requests....i get sidetracked and busy
rubie

11 Years Ago

Thanks for that reminder, but I usually am not in the habit of doing read requests, either sending o.. read more
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

understood. i will try not to be so absent minded in the future.....
I like how you were straightforward and honest about the policy and how you compared that to love where all sales are final...Brilliant idea too...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


rubie

11 Years Ago

Always best to be straightforward in affairs of the heart.....

Thanks for the review...
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

So true...You are welcome...:)
greedy head - nice - glad you finally recognized - love is not a starter pistol... have no idea what that means - but there it is...

Posted 11 Years Ago


rubie

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review. Appreciate the read!
yes, you do grab on to a metaphor, and don't let it go...the box inside the box...there is always something hidden...lovers do that...and when we open that last box...it is often times NO gift@!

Posted 11 Years Ago


rubie

11 Years Ago

So true, jacob.

Thanks for your review!
I like this piece, full of assertiveness. We do get wrapped up in the illusion of someone's affection. You carried the metaphor really well throughout - nicely penned!

Posted 11 Years Ago


rubie

11 Years Ago

Appreciate your kind words and your reading!

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