Too Much Room

 

i am younger than really old houses

with decrepit shutters shutting out the winds

of romance---

  

a mansion of youth

 

with so many unopened doors

 

i need you to be the key

 

unlock me.

 

no one's really lived here in a

very long time.

 

 

 

Reviews

[quinfinn]

this is just pure romance, runs off the tongue like hot treacle on warm waffles....and the metaphor is genius. a house with no occupants, simply for lack of the key...someone holds it. beautiful.......

[rubie]

I love your review of this piece. Thank you so much.

[quinfinn]

welcome!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I find romance even in really old houses. To the poet, all is romance; not only love and life but desire and death as well. I feel as if we are always young but our bodies wear out. Could it not be so with houses as well? But the function of a house is to be a home. And as a certain poet once observed, "There is all the difference in a human being who is in love and another who is not as there would be with two lamps; one that is not lit and another which is. The lamp was there all along and it was a good lamp. But now, it is putting forth light and THAT is its true purpose."

[rubie]

I am in agreement with you....we ARE forever young in our hearts and our minds, as it should be. Our bodies wear out. And yes, allowing love into our lives is like flipping that light switch on. Without it, there is darkness.

Thank you so much for your insightful commentary. Much appreciated. You've added so much depth to my words...

[Stella Armour]

the doors must be opened gently and carefully for romance to bloom

[rubie]

Definitely. Thanks for your review!

[Stella Armour]

you are welcome rubie..

[poet2angels (lynda)]

I love the metaphor and emotion in this one! Once again, you have the perfect ending! You had my attention in the first stanza.
Lynda

[rubie]

Sorry for not acknowledging your review sooner! Thanks for the read and the terrific comments, Lynda!! xoxo

[timothygalexander]

kind of sad but kind of sexy. Intresting read

[rubie]

Thanks so much for stopping by to read my work! I love your comment on it...

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

i love this. I remember feeling this way once.

[rubie]

Thank you. It's always good to hear from a passing reader that he or she can relate to the feelings in a piece. Appreciate the read.

[Daniel Eckert]

Very enjoyable love poem.

[rubie]

I am so glad you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for taking the time to comment.

[Rick Puetter]

Nice. A very strong metaphor. Sometimes standing, empty houses can be so sad, a shadow of former happy and loving times. Brings a tear.

Best regards,

Rick

[rubie]

Thank you for reading my work and leaving a comment. Much appreciated.

[Rick Puetter]

My pleasure.