After Hours

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

After Hours

Lamp-glow glints off ‘ street

     Bar lights dark--all silent now

          Homeless pull tight sheets

 

 

©2011 Richard Puetter

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Photographer: Chuckoutrearseats.  Licensed for use under a Creative Common Attribution-ShareAlike 2.0 Generic license.  This photo was taken on March 9, 2010 in Hendon, Sunderland, England, GB, using a Sony DSC-S930.  The original image can be seen at:

http://www.flickr.com/photos/48625620@N00/4420456084/sizes/o/in/photostream/

Reviews

[Roland Petrov]

This haiku is all the more poignant during the pandemic. The bar lights are dark, but being homeless is even worse. Did you mean to use the apostrophe between "off" and "street"? Was "a" the omission? Even if, not sure you need it. Hope you and yours are fine.

[ShaneBerry]

very peaceful, like an intermission in between busy loud and big daytime life of the city. a very relaxing scene. like a mirror to describing animals in the wild resting before the next day of life. the city dies and is resurrected every day you could say.
no spelling errors (as usual you bore editors haha just kidding :D)
and incredible word choice.
very short, to the point. most of you work is long (but in the best way haha) this is a nice piece, i could see it being the caption for a painting or possibly this very picture. thank you for sharing friend :)

-S.B.-

[Gandré]

I liked this Haiku for we turn our sight towards those in need. and nicely done, with the cute rhyme.

[papaed]

An older neighborhood revived... swept clean. Like many in my hometown... in the USA. Your words, the realization that this is in the UK, thoughts of homeless living in alleys and old cars mix with a romantic lamp light glint. Thought provoking and well written. I must confess, Rick, that I've not been to Writer's Cafe myself in about a year. It's changed some. I may post some of my newer writing.
Peace my friend,
papaed

[Mockingbird]

i can picture the silence at this time when all the bars are closed, and the homeless people trying to make do with what they have to bed down. very descriptive haiku.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This had a reality feel to it, wrote perfecly!

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Reminds me of many a scenarios ....... thanks for the nice write......

[Jasmine]

I love haikus... a lot.... my love is no different here. It's like you can't get them wrong, with a style like that.
Atmospheric, great writing.

[Muse]

I lived in Chicago for 4 years....this describes the down-town scene to a T. The picture you chose is quite inspirational. I can still imagine the cold brisk Chicago air, the pan handlers at every corner.........depressing a bit, but I miss it. Bar lights all silent......it must be around 4 am. :)

[Belator Books]

As far as short form goes, this was one of the better examples that I've read. Despite this, it felt boxed in... as if a story lay inside struggling to get out... or as I think about it this feels like a Hemmingway-type musing aloud, in the midst of a late drink on a hot summer night. I can smell bourbon and feel the humid breeze flow gently by.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I like the silence of this poem and the depth. When all the world has gone home to sleep, the homeless pull their sheets up tight. No one noticing, no one caring. I like it!