Wave

A lonely soul on the ocean of the world

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Photographer: polandeze (http://www.flickr.com/photos/polandeze/).  Licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution 2.0 Generic license.  This image has been modified from the original.  The original image can be found at http://www.flickr.com/photos/polandeze/532139062/sizes/o/.

 

 

 

Wave

 

Lone brave wave upon the ocean

Adrift midst endless sea and sky

Do you ponder your existence?

Or merely swell, then crest and die

 

What’s Life’s purpose?  I’ve no notion

Adrift midst pointless dreams and sighs

At Life’s end dissolves all pretense
All lies depart as Night draws nigh

 

Serene wave upon the ocean

Teach me peace and not to cry

For death’s terror provide defense

Don’t let Life’s riches, fear deny

 

For Life's sorrow grant me potion

And for my days contentment buy

With self-ego I will dispense

Disperse like wave, not asking why

 

 

©2010 Richard Puetter

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Reviews

[Yellow Butterfly]

Such poignant words conveyed with real emotions felt throughout this beautiful write.
"Do you ponder your existence"
"Or merely swell, then crest and die"

I loved your use of metaphor here, the thought of been a lost soul out at sea is a very sad thought indeed.

Beautifully conveyed Rick

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Fantastic!!! The same rhyme scheme, now that's hard to do and keep a poem interesting. You did it!

[Mark]

All four verses, with precisely the same rhyme scheme, a stylistic innovation that nearly eluded me. Echoes the incessant repitition of the wave, formed by forces in the depths of the seas both uncomprehended and uncomprehending, nor even visible until it approaches the shallows. The currents change season to season, tide to tide, millenium upon millenium, and each distinct wave breaks heedlessly upon the expended spume of the last. Unceasing and undiminished, self-refreshing power. You have filled my eyes with ocean water, and my heart with a thousand unrelated feelings. Thank you sir, for this awakening of my sea-soul!

[Jeff Bresee]

Very nice...I love "Do you ponder your existence, or merely swell, crest and die." Ingenious!

[Sheila Kline]

Dear Rick!

When one sits and ponders purpose, direction in life, indeed a self analysis may occur, and to compare all to a single ocean wave seems perfectly feasible as you note questions, conditions likened to the rolling of the wave, asking for the serene wave to teach not to cry, but rather peace, to have contentment for days remaining, to be humble and not ruled by self-ego, and as part of this not to even ask why!

Your observations are remarkable, and even more so the expert way you have penned all to verse! As the wave rolls in and back out again, so does the coherence of your thoughts touch our minds!

Excellent!!

Best Regards.....and thanks for the pleasure of reading and critiquing another memorable poem!
Sheila

[Legion]

I've always found it peaceful staring at the waves. Of course, I imagine a tsunami coming at me might just change that feeling. Nicely done.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I see the contemplation of life and death here and I quite understand the metaphor. But really, we are only teardrops in the vast churning oceans of blue-green brine. Our saltiness is an attribute given to us from the source; the same cosmic ocean from whence we came. There is nothing to be feared in returning to the beginning; after all, all rivers run to the sea. Excellent write, thank you for sharing this with me.

[deeps]

Wow! This is deep and powerful!
Such a meaningful write here. Such feeling put into this.
I like this, wonderful rhythm and flow as well.

[cest la vie]

Rick,
I am a woman who feels the waves in her veins. Growing up with the ocean as her playground and best friend, I feel and understand this piece so well.

The power of the water as it surges to shore, retreating out to the vast expanse of places faraway.

This is beautifully written and reads soft and powerful all at the same time. Mimics the waves...