Warrior of Life

Rise and lift thy spirit!

 

 

Warrior of Life

 

 

Oh, trumpet ye, Warrior of Life!

Blow thy horn o’er sea and plain

Thy brightness is a blessing

Across the Earth you duel life’s pain

Transcendency professing

 

Oh, fight ye, then, Giver of Hope!

Wield thy sword and crush despair

Life’s power now asserting

Thy learning is beyond compare

To rise, self-power affirming

 

So do not fall brave citizen

Lift thy soul o’er fear of death

Thy spirit has the prowess

Live fully while you still draw breath

Fight Man’s most dire weakness

 

Arise ye, then, all bleak, dark men―

Black spirit does not suit thee

Of Life, drink full and deeply

Defiant be, and stand with me

Don’t sell life’s treasures cheaply

 

Then trumpet ye, Warrior of Life!

Sound thy horn up to the skies

Thy horn call despair's warning

And though Man’s purpose death belies

Thy spirit ne’er brook mourning

 

 

 

©2008 Richard Puetter

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Reviews

[Scott Free]

Ah! Wonderful, wonderful!
I read this aloud and loved it! Very enjoyable; my heart soared at the end. The thees and thys make it especially good. It looks *really* polished, but if you want I'll tell you a few things I would change, if it were my poem (and I wish it was);
So, do not fall brave citizen
Lift thy soul o'er fear of death

The one sneaky little comma in there actually stumbled me. I think 'So do not fall brave citizen' would be more desirable. It's more straightforward, with more bravado, more moxie. Funny what one little comma can do.

"Oh, fight ye, then, giver of Hope!
Wield thy sword and crush despair
Life's power now affirming
Thy learning is beyond compare
To rise, self-power asserting"

Ok, 'affirming' and 'asserting' don't really rhyme all that well. Even 'assuring' (although I'm not sure that's what you want) would be better because it doesn't have a hard consonant. Even though assuring and affirming don't really rhyme when you think about it, they fit together pretty well when you read it. Even if you didn't change this line, it would still work ok. I would just change it if I were you.
This was time well spent on my part, reading. Great job!

[Max]

Another wonderful poem, although not my favorite of yours, sad to say. Nonetheless, it is great. I love the use of "ye" and "thy" and all those things. Makes things much better XD.

[Sheila Kline]

March on ye weary pilgrims, fill the glass and taste the good fruit of life....that is how this exquisite write of inspiration makes me feel! It is a battle cry and one to persevere through the trials of life to the finish line.
I have always loved the old English write, so this strikes a chord in my spirit!
Beautiful, just beautiful, and has helped during this time of personal trials!
Thank you for directing me to this memorable write!
Sheila.......A Battle Worn Spirit Forging On!

[Gossamerwings36]

Real very good, I like the style you wrote in, makes it all the more grander !

[Miss Prince]

Very hymnal-sounding, almost Shakespearean. Perhaps on purpose. I see no weakness, except Transcendency is hard to say. Try saying it, and tell me if you can't substitute it for a better word. It's just -- I think poetry is meant to be performed, so if you can't pronounce the word, I wouldn't bother putting it in the poem.

"Never use a long word where a short one will do."

[Jetta Zippora]

Beautiful!

[Simplicity]

Incredible poem. I like the old English. I especially like "So, do not fall brave citizen. Lift thy soul o'er fear of death. Thy spirit has the prowess. Live fully while you still draw breath, fight Man's most dire weakness"
A great write, Rick. Fun to read, too.
--Reckoning In Death

[Fran Marie]

Arise ye, then, all bleak, dark men―
black spirit does not suit thee.
Of Life, drink full and deeply.
Defiant be, and stand with me,don't sell life's treasures cheaply


A lovely flowing versed poem with the feel of old world charm

grand descriptives thru! out and a great message therein~ live life fully

while we still can , inspiring advice to be sure~ Fran Marie

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This is strong and WONDERFUL! Sometimes one of the troubles with rhyming is that we look for and choose a word to rhyme, and it does . . . and it is an excellent rhyme but not a strong rhyme. I do not thrill to the word "weakness" as used in the 3rd stanza. By the way, I am quite guilty of this.

[Katherine Wyatt]

I can not find much to polish here...I love the lines:
"Drink Life most full and deeply.
Defiant be, and stand with me,
don't sell life's treasures cheaply."

I think it is a magnificent write!