Warrior of Life

Rise and lift thy spirit!

 

 

Warrior of Life

 

 

Oh, trumpet ye, Warrior of Life!

Blow thy horn o’er sea and plain

Thy brightness is a blessing

Across the Earth you duel life’s pain

Transcendency professing

 

Oh, fight ye, then, Giver of Hope!

Wield thy sword and crush despair

Life’s power now asserting

Thy learning is beyond compare

To rise, self-power affirming

 

So do not fall brave citizen

Lift thy soul o’er fear of death

Thy spirit has the prowess

Live fully while you still draw breath

Fight Man’s most dire weakness

 

Arise ye, then, all bleak, dark men―

Black spirit does not suit thee

Of Life, drink full and deeply

Defiant be, and stand with me

Don’t sell life’s treasures cheaply

 

Then trumpet ye, Warrior of Life!

Sound thy horn up to the skies

Thy horn call despair's warning

And though Man’s purpose death belies

Thy spirit ne’er brook mourning

 

 

 

©2008 Richard Puetter

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Reviews

[Scott Free]

Ah! Wonderful, wonderful!
I read this aloud and loved it! Very enjoyable; my heart soared at the end. The thees and thys make it especially good. It looks *really* polished, but if you want I'll tell you a few things I would change, if it were my poem (and I wish it was);
So, do not fall brave citizen
Lift thy soul o'er fear of death

The one sneaky little comma in there actually stumbled me. I think 'So do not fall brave citizen' would be more desirable. It's more straightforward, with more bravado, more moxie. Funny what one little comma can do.

"Oh, fight ye, then, giver of Hope!
Wield thy sword and crush despair
Life's power now affirming
Thy learning is beyond compare
To rise, self-power asserting"

Ok, 'affirming' and 'asserting' don't really rhyme all that well. Even 'assuring' (although I'm not sure that's what you want) would be better because it doesn't have a hard consonant. Even though assuring and affirming don't really rhyme when you think about it, they fit together pretty well when you read it. Even if you didn't change this line, it would still work ok. I would just change it if I were you.
This was time well spent on my part, reading. Great job!

[Roland Petrov]

This poem is evidence that one doesn't have to invoke a deity, nor life eternal, to be inspirational.

[Lyingwithlions]

I couldn't count how many times I've read this unshakable piece of work.

I'm sure I'll know it by heart soon. :)

"Arise ye, then, all bleak, dark men―
Black spirit does not suit thee
Of Life, drink full and deeply
Defiant be, and stand with me
Don’t sell life’s treasures cheaply"

Highest regards,

Chuck

[Indra Neil]

superb composition and truly inspiring write! well done! :)

[Lyingwithlions]

Marvelous piece! I am definitely a new fan of your essays, and poetry. Looking forward to reading many more.

Thank you for sharing. :)

[carrotcruncher]

really enjoyed this, it almost shouts itself out of the page. Rousing!

[Quiet Child]

this was just added to my collection of favorites I've read. you did a wonderful job on this piece. the time placement is also a great prespective to write from..

[Sheila Kline]

Hi Rick!

Congratulations on your top 5 rating in the "Change The World" contest!! You already know how much I love this poem...and of course you have gotten my vote for the top spot!! You deserve the #1 spot!!
Again, kudos!!

Best Regards,
Sheila

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Warrior of life
(Review for Change the World Competition) This piece is very well crafted, you can feel the power as you speak the words. Scored perfect 10’s in the categories; Art, Craft and subject. Some brilliant lines in this work, especially “Thy learning is beyond compare, To rise, self-power asserting”. So many people placed their faith in a God, but to have faith in yourself and rise by your own effort and ambition is far more healthy for the evolving soul. Great Work