LIfe 2

in life we have enimies and friends

then there is the beginnings and ends

we get get picked on and we make fun

we dream at the moon and run in the sun

 

we like it sometimes

but love it always 

and we will forever remember

these extremely crazy days

  

yeah have love and we have hate

we think it sucks and we think it's great

we will always have one

and we carry it like it weighs a ton

we might have a husband or a wife

but we will always have life

 

Reviews

[HereWithoutYou<3]

This is a really good poem. It shows the good and the bad, the different and the same, the love and the hate. Everything life truly is.

[Jazique]

That was beautiful and went to tegther lovely keep it up.

[Erin]

This is good. I'm glad that the second stanza didn't rhyme in two lines. It's slightly inspirational and deep. Nice job, sir. You did a very good job.
PBP

[Dark Empress]

Nicely written. I really like this :) Thank you for sharing.

[Arya_the_elven_lady]

Nice one :D

Just need some work on punctuation and spelling.

[Short.Nerd]

This is very powerful and very nice! Great job!

[Caitlynxoxo]

very, VERY powerful poem! you spoke of life in a creative, beautiful fashion! My favourite lines:

"we get get picked on and we make fun
we dream at the moon and run in the sun"

So dreamy!! Thanks for sharing

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Roxi L]

this a powerful writing. I think we may have the actual Romeo Montigue here.
Roxi
Writing keeps the dream alive

[Bridget Mcmaken]

wow very nice writing, Love it. wonderful work.

[Blossom]

really nice. I look forward to reading your work.