for you

for you an ode to you

for without you my skies aren't blue

why you ask is it you

when you are near my tears are few

when you come by my voice is a pitch of high

without you i might die

no not her or she

but it is you who completes me

they say you're ugly and cruel

but you. . . . .you are a jewel

for you it is hard and tough

for you are a diamond in the rough

what is it that i must do
to gain the trust from you

please tell me, tell me true

for tis i who loves you

Reviews

Sweet piece from a sweet guy! I loved it!

[HereWithoutYou<3]

Aww, it's so cutee. I love it.

[r]

This is really sweet and cute. :) I like it.

[Erin]

The word tis should have an apostrophe, like 'tis. 'Cause technically it's a contraction and it's one of those things you need if you're gonna put an apostrophe in "you're" so you can remain consistent.
It feels slightly Shakespearean to me, but it's not on the level of Shakespeare (if it were, why would it be HERE and not in a book???). Nice job, sir.
PBP

[Arya_the_elven_lady]

Hm! An excellent poem, with some (yes, I`m going there) capitalization errors. I see the need to improve here, but the meaning in this writing is shown clearly.

[Jazique]

How nice marvelous job.

[Bridget Mcmaken]

wow great poem. I love it, very nice work.

[Closed Account]

Aww, this is reallyy cute! (:
Great job!!

[Caitlynxoxo]

very sweet, very beautiful! :) I couldn't stop reading until the end,a dn even though i had to read it over again, just to keep the words in my head. Thanks for sharing!

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Roxi L]

this really touched me...great job
Roxi
Writing keeps the dream alive