::Focus::

Its hard to say why
My words just wont stay
Clips and glimpses
Flying away

 

 

Focus!
Focus!

 

 

You fool can't you see?
Your thoughts your thoughts
Will never go or flee

 

 

They may run
And they may hide
But like a shadow
Remain at your side

 

 

Within your mind
Are realms undefined
Cracks and creases
So hard to find

 

 

But fear you not
For their always there
Your thoughts your thoughts
Are alive in the air

 

 

You must stay steady
And do no sway
Sharpen your senses
And take a deep breath

 

 

You're going to be fine
There's nothing the matter
Put pen to paper
And don't let them scatter

 

 

Your words are divine
Ideas square and in line

 

 

Just center your being
And soon we'll be seeing

 

 

Your thoughts in play
And this time, they will stay

Reviews

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

I really like the first half of this poem; so much so that I'm adding it to my favorites. Every person who has ever tried to write creatively or focus on something for long periods of time knows what this is like, so it's instantly relatable. There are some great metaphors and images produced, like flying away, seeing clips and glimpses, or the thoughts trying to hide.

I love the way the poem sounds if it were to end on the line "Are alive in the air".

The second half, starting with "You must stay steady" is mostly a pep talk and isn't as gripping to me. There are not as many strong images and metaphors as in the first half, and is therefore not as poetic.

The exception would be the lines "Your words are divine / Ideas square and in line" because I like the mental picture and the rhyme here. A good piece of work on the whole. I hope to see more from you.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Yes yes. Related instantly. Sucks don't it? There just beyond reach and ya just can't get them! Great write

[Whiskurz]

A very well written piece my friend.......Whisk