birthday

birthday

A Poem by Ross Davison

 

i
 
w
as
 
born today,
 
all the smiles sipping soda,
and
cake so
fluff
E
 
the way she hugs me, makes the
one
blowout the
 
candles
sway the swerve
feel every
 
she steps on my toe, in the shuffle step
 
 
while
as a child,
no one
was there on my ten b-day
 
even girlfriend a macho and
stong kickyourass
"wanna go out?",
 
the mere kiss the taste is lips the breath heats steam
 
her skin so
 
the desert,
 
never imagined so cheesecake pillow,
rubbing the roof
on
m
y
mouth
 
 
 
i
was born
 
to
day,
 
 
and the couch,
 
sings me asleep
 
the deep
underwater
release,
her breath sips
from
me.
 

© 2008 Ross Davison


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i'm not going to leave a comment on every single write you have up here but i could. i'm really diggin your style and your topic here is pulling at my heartstrings. love the way you break the sentences and phrases up. it's artistically pleasing.

Posted 17 Years Ago


"all the smiles sipping soda,"

immediately made me think of...

..."Big S, little s, what begins with S?
Sammy sipping soda pop, S s S"... (Dr. Seus, ABC's)

Which is fantastic, in that it brings that raucousness of a childs birthday right to the fore.

Maybe I'm reading it wrong, (or more likely, reading too much into it), but it seems like the birthday boy here is making a progression from his mother to his lover, with the 10th bday deliniating the two. It's a cool poem.




Posted 17 Years Ago



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Ross Davison
Ross Davison

New Bedford, MA



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Born on Cape Cod, and transported from school to school, I began writing at 15. Twisting the way the words layed on the paper, spreading them out to accentuate pauses or connections. I've been publi.. more..

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A Poem by Ross Davison