untitled (what if we are clouds?)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

what if we are clouds?

 

touching

mixing to join.

 

some in strat streamline wispy and thin,

 

the fluffy bask (sun)day,

 

the crowds of gangs

roll(in) and lightning strikes,

 

the cool fog hugging close dew,

 

 

and sepe r a t e,

 

over Izu Hanto,

 

over Monterey,

 

Katrina touched d(gr)o(ou)wn(nd) in New Orleans

mad as hell blast reminds,

she’s throwing his stuff                          out the window,

 

and

 

over the Whaling City,

 

i can see you,

 

dancing,

 

over Boston.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

so you...such style

so few words, great impact. lovely poem..

[Heather Angelika Dooley]

Your poems are like abstract art. I just love it! I wish there were more of you, but I don't. There is only one.

[Shemena Campbell]

My husband likes to talk about clouds as being the one of the great scientific mysteries out there, and as an excellent and obvious example of chaos theory. Given that we humans could be described in those terms exactly, well dear, you may be on to something.

I like the poem very much - your writing has had a very delicate touch lately.

S.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

there is something special about this.... i like it.

"the cool fog hugging close dew,

and sepe r a t e, "

great lines

hugs

[Greyson Davison]

This is awsome!!!!!!

[Leah Simone]

Very interesting piece in the way you did ground and down and showed us serenity and violence within clouds - we are like that to a certain degree. Nice comparison - never thought about it like that - Leah

[Mohl083]

i too enjoy clouds. i believe they know something i do not. the mystery of clouds must be explained! to compare people to clouds is a stroke of genius. clouds can indeed be gentle, vengeful and even playful. i enjoyed this.