2

 

help less

romantic

(i

confess)

films heart

sing

endings in smile lite

light

rain soaked cobblestone

river walk umbrella

(h)

serendipity

(e)

whisper love from slated rooftop

and cotton candy stuffed toy prizes

(l)

take my hand

touching soul warm, scent

(p)

lilacs in breezes of palpus osculation

jacob’s ladder picnic under willow tree

while whippoorwills play their conversation

amongst chimes butterfly, kiss

a

n

d fall,

winter sweater weather in fuzzy lined boots

(as beautiful as you are)

grinning and vibrant

leaves highlight aura, hair radiance

i

(me)

awkward and ecstatic

dreams of

in quilted down comfort

and spooning,

cubby hole restaurant

charm

(i

can’t

for get

 

you)

 

Reviews

[Emilia]

So incredibly beautiful. This poem reminds me (in parts) of E.E. Cummings, though with more sentimentality and a professor that I once had, Earl S. Braggs. I actually like this poem better than my professor's, though.

And just for the sake of being a critic (though it's hard with your poetry), I will say this...I wish that you would have switched the "action" between "and" and "fall" so that you get the action with the word at hand. But that's only minor and something that probably doesn't fit with your vision.

Great job!

[William J. Wilkins]

I really like "visual" poems, and visual poems with excellent word play are even better. This is one of the best I've seen in the genre. Bravo!

[Heather Angelika Dooley]

Yes, you have a VERY unique style and that is always a fresh thing to see!

I loved this part:

"while whippoorwills play their conversation
amongst chimes butterfly, kiss
a
n
d fall,
winter sweater weather in fuzzy lined boots
(as beautiful as you are)"

Your layout is so artful. You have something all your own and that is going to help you go where no one else has gone.

[Vanessa Wheeler]

this is indeed beautiful!! i loved every part of it.. so far, i'm def enjoying your style!