I'm not religious as such but I am spiritual..yet aS child I always found the story of Samson from the bible very intriguing. After all this while I began contemplating the situation his life came to
He cried out “O Lord, please remember me and please
strengthen me only this once, O God, that I may be avenged on the enemies for
my two eyes.” And he grasped the two middle pillars on which the house rested.
***
A soldier and his salt walk on the grounds cold,
The distance is no longer known to the old.
The winters crowns; they stub his roughened feet,
The Devils snide, the angels hide, not saying what
he needs to be told.
As I keep running
towards the horizon, louder my feet get,
The grounds no longer
cold, the heat in my veins pulsate.
I crush the first touch,
only to watch myself in pain, in sweat,
Let me climb, Only this
once, oh God
The walls too high but I
can see through as yet.
The turn has revealed of the masses in misery
enough,
Biting at his hands, as he hardens his fists tough
Blunt the blows, yet the that he is shield has not
tested its steel,
The distance has not moved, only the path rebuffed.
I can hear as my palms
get scarred as they ravage,
The flame in my soul
begs me to let it out and set it all ablaze.
I pound my head against
these stones praying not to be savage,
Let me break, Only this
once, oh God,
To bring down what has
made me crawl and scavenge.
The tears of heaven, fall gently upon his shoulder,
The woman cries to the skies in, no one’s told her.
The scarred back near bent, erupts, to blood and
wings,
Soaring into the grey, his legs still chained to
the boulder.
I can feel my hearts as
it beats start pounding,
To leave every inch of
my skin behind I have started,
The split the air leaves
my ears resounding,
Let me strengthen, Only
this once, my God,
As I bring down these pillars that shields my
dawning.
The barrier’s been broken; what seemed like baptism
is done
Never knowing that the horizon is the journey
itself
Lying crumbled below, eyes of those sleeping yet
awaits the sun,
The heights blur these visions that speak of the
none.
I let go of my senses,
all but one is still awake,
To keep moving into the tufts
the skies throw at me,
The distance is the same
as it was, with no cuts to take.
Let me burn, Not only
this once, my God,
For the soldier and his
salt can never live without ache.
***
He leaned his weight against them, his right hand
on the one and his left hand on the other. In that moment the Lord had returned
on hearing his prayer. Strength returned for its last break, in death and
destroyed all that was harming his people.
Please pardon any grammatical (unintended) or rhyme-based (intended) errors in the work. I hope you enjoy the piece, looking forward to your reviews. Cheers! :)
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This was pretty cool, it seemed to be from Samson's perspective, and that was awesome. the way it flowed was intriguing, and I liked it. The way you worded the lines... wow. I also think this could be used in everyday life. We are beaten down, suffering as Christ has, and we can ask the Lord for His strength, just this once, just one more time, and maybe, just maybe we can make a difference before we die, maybe, just maybe, we can bring the house down.
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9 Years Ago
thanks for the appreciation of the perspective and style :) I agree with you, if we do introspect an.. read morethanks for the appreciation of the perspective and style :) I agree with you, if we do introspect and reach for our inner strength and love, maybe the impossible isnt really a phenomenon. Cheers!
Well, one of the greatest things is there is no such thing as impossible. The word itself says, "I'm.. read moreWell, one of the greatest things is there is no such thing as impossible. The word itself says, "I'm possible." And with God, anything can be done. :)
9 Years Ago
I believe so too :)
9 Years Ago
So we all must rise... only this once in this fact!
Lol.. i always make fun of all body builders as Samson.When i read this i was pretty awed by the narration.Even though i have gone through this story like a thousands of times in Sunday school.I think Samson to be a fool to trust.As i am a Cynic thats my perspective.But lemme stop babbling and come straight to poem. I always admire writers or poets specifically who have the trait to narrate a story in poem form.Thats something tricky but those who can do it are Clever. I hope The Samson within you rose up not to seek vengeance but to take on the world.. Cheers :) *keep writing*
~Sophy
Lol you are right sophy, he did rise to take on the world :)
Cheers and thanks for that lovel.. read moreLol you are right sophy, he did rise to take on the world :)
Cheers and thanks for that lovely review .
9 Years Ago
:) hah.. it seems i am getting addicted to lengthy. Was a pleasure.
9 Years Ago
well i'll always cater to that addiction certainly, most of my pieces are of similar length.. :P gla.. read morewell i'll always cater to that addiction certainly, most of my pieces are of similar length.. :P glad you like it :)
I like how you sssssssttttrretch the story of Samson to it's deepest meaning. Beautiful extension of a simple truth. I'm giving you a nice big rating. Keep writing!
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9 Years Ago
Thanks a lot Victoria, Im glad you liked my interpretation of the tale. thanks for the kind words, c.. read moreThanks a lot Victoria, Im glad you liked my interpretation of the tale. thanks for the kind words, cheers! :)
You did very well with this poem. You create powerful character and situation.
"Let me burn, Not only this once, my God,
For the soldier and his salt can never live without ache."
Above lines are true and taught to many. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
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9 Years Ago
Thanks a lot John I appreciate you liking it. The character is something we all can learn from. Chee.. read moreThanks a lot John I appreciate you liking it. The character is something we all can learn from. Cheers!
This was pretty cool, it seemed to be from Samson's perspective, and that was awesome. the way it flowed was intriguing, and I liked it. The way you worded the lines... wow. I also think this could be used in everyday life. We are beaten down, suffering as Christ has, and we can ask the Lord for His strength, just this once, just one more time, and maybe, just maybe we can make a difference before we die, maybe, just maybe, we can bring the house down.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
thanks for the appreciation of the perspective and style :) I agree with you, if we do introspect an.. read morethanks for the appreciation of the perspective and style :) I agree with you, if we do introspect and reach for our inner strength and love, maybe the impossible isnt really a phenomenon. Cheers!
Well, one of the greatest things is there is no such thing as impossible. The word itself says, "I'm.. read moreWell, one of the greatest things is there is no such thing as impossible. The word itself says, "I'm possible." And with God, anything can be done. :)
9 Years Ago
I believe so too :)
9 Years Ago
So we all must rise... only this once in this fact!
I am an atheist, I really don't know what to say here, but I liked the writing here. I can say, if the person create god in them and make himself enough confident that he can rise and break walls around he can.
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9 Years Ago
Im glad you could take that essence out of the piece mayank, its about human strength and the abilit.. read moreIm glad you could take that essence out of the piece mayank, its about human strength and the ability to believe and pull through that I wished to showcase more than anything. Ifwe cannot to break through, then we rise up
I like to extract lessons from those stories and apply it in my life. I don't care much about doctrine and so forth. Excellent , sir...:)...........
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9 Years Ago
Thank you for the review Sami :) I take it in the same vein as well; its better to take the essence .. read moreThank you for the review Sami :) I take it in the same vein as well; its better to take the essence than believing things line to line
I love Samson story myself, and your poem did a wonderful job depicting this honorable man! It is important for us to keep our promises. Hence, we should not be too hasty in making them. Thank you for the share :)
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9 Years Ago
thank you for that kind review. and yes it is honor that lasts us in life :) cheers!
It is good to see that someone today gleans nourishment of truth from the message of Samson's life: Death with honor is to be preferred over a life of dishonor ... Thanks for sharing ...
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Thank you marvin for valuing the perspective. Cheers!
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