Marys not coming back

Jack was a man who had the world at his feet.

A wife and four children his life was complete.

There was no-one or nothing who could ruin

what he had. A nice house great job. A rich life

that was grand.

As he walks trough his door one rainy afternoon.

Expecting no more than a lovely, irish made stew.

As he calls to his wife in a happy oul tune.

Hello mary! are u here mary! as he echo's the room.

Jack walks to the kicthen and opens the fridge.

Slams it back on his self with the fright that he see's.

With big letters ive left you hung up on the door.

"I know what you did Jack, I dont love you no more"

He runs for his phone in panic and grief.

So stunned and shocked he can bearly speak.

As the tears bally dance right out of his eyes

He calls and calls but there is no replies.

Days pass and still not a word.

Jack just cant understand that Marys

just not in love. shes taking the children.

Shes taking his heart. Jacks unconsolable

Marys torn him apart.

He Calls to her mothers.

I have not seen her she sneers.

Jack says "I just want to talk" as he wells up in tears.

Marys mother replys, "She's not coming back"

"So turn your self around and hit the road Jack"

"What did i do! jack yells out aloud.

"you know what you did" as she spits it right out.

who's Sandra and Sharon and Rita and Loo.

Who's mags and Emma and Alison to.

All the woman you screwed behide her back.

Now you know Jack. why Marys not coming back

Reviews

[Zachary_James]

Wow great read, my only suggestion is when you put dialogue in poems place qoutations,
" I have not seen her" She sneers
" I just want to talk"
" I've left you Jack, i know what you did"


Those things, i've listed should have qoutations. Add Comma's in between your sentences, ( For example before someone talks add a comma).

but other than that, great work.

[J. J. Nightingale]

WOW .. YOU HAD MY EAR FROM THE FIRST LINE .. .. AND I AM A FAN OF RHYME ..


STUPID JACK .. LOL .. JASMINE :)

[WILDERNESS]

oh man,
Rose, you do really blast the door out of hinges.
so direct, so intense
Great job

[Distant horizons]

Ouch. Jacks been a busy boy. Great read.