Its dark in there

I see it.

Its dark in there,

It was that place, i roamed alone.

It was so long, so very shallow.

It locked me up, this my dark hole.

It shook me up and held me back

I was lost with no way out.

 

Just like a pill killing a headache.

You took my hand and pulled me out.

You showed me sunshine.

You showed me warmth.

You put the love back in my heart.

Like watered seeds, you made me flourish,

into the being, that i am now.

 

I see it, its dark in there,

Its a place that im not going.

Reviews

[Chris]

Looking back over a shoulder can be hard. Where we were vs where we now ARE!

"Its" - beginning the third line COULD be a typo or not. If you used it with intent it can "fit". Character language, accent, and tone can add a sense of personality, which adds to an emotional impact... but I wonder - because the rest wasn't personalized.

I think I understand what you wanted understood. But would you consider making it more "grabbing" emotionally?

[emmajoy]

One of your earlier poems, full of feelings waiting to escape. In places heartbreaking, in others a little unsure of how to express itself. For some reason i think of life before birth .. but probably wrong. Rosemary, thank you

[Sleeping Maiden]

How interesting. I like the piece. Yeah, it's hard being put inside the dark place that certain events or things can push us to... some are pulled out.. and glad that you were able to get love back to you. Nice write.

[WILDERNESS]

very nice way to express that.............i think we all have dark places but lucky are those who are pulled out.......
keep it up Rose

[Chris Yip]

Thank God we have loved ones and friends that help us through dark times. Well said and written.

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully done. seeing the light is nearer thjan the dark. great write.