Crossroads

     you ...

 

Keep flashing in my mind

everyday and every night

you're like a crossroad to my heart

can't keep the distance apart

you're like a swift train

rolling by,,,

flames shooting from the sky

signals flashing

and whistles

 

blaring your  name ..  ;)

 

 

By Maria Rose♥

 

 

 

Copyright © 2014 maria rose

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

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it s nice very light and delight. tell everthing about life. thank you

[maria ( rose)]

thank you for the visit and for your review..:)) appreciate it so much

[Sami Khalil]

Short, to the point but one that speaks volumes. In my library...:).........

[maria ( rose)]

Samiiiii thank you!!! :))..............

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........................

[Melissa S]

I really enjoyed reading this! It read really quickly but I think that just adds to the the feeling of the train and all the other movement language. The only thing I would add is that in a tiny poem like this, using the same word twice can either add to the meaning or take away from it. You use "flashing" twice. If you meant to do this, awesome. If not, maybe go back and re-read the poem and see how you feel about having it repeated. If you are still okay with it, fantastic! It was just a small thing that as a reader I noticed :) Great poem though! :)

[maria ( rose)]

thank you Milissa:))..yes, gonna leave it as is for now may go back and edit. Just something that I had written over a year ago never got to finish. Seen it today & said why not (was meant to be a song not a poem.) glad you liked it and thank you so much for the visit:))

[NoelHC]

Reading this gives me the feeling of hearing the train wheels clicking on the tracks as the train passes by. Nice use of images. One nit pick point, the lines beginning with "your like" should be "you're like" but otherwise, I like the feel of this poem.

[maria ( rose)]

all fixed & thanks Noel,,glad you liked it :))