Unbalanced Elements

Unbalanced Elements

A Poem by poetry-kiddo alienbaba
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When things just dont seem to go your way...when it just doesnt seem right for you and for your spirit..

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Unbalanced Elements!

UNBALANCED ELEMENTS
Fellow-Human......
Its good to hear you speak your heart out!!
Be what you want to be....be what you are meant to be...be what you are!
Do you know....we all are made out of 4 elements....AIR...FIRE...WATER...and...EARTH.
Some of us have a little more of this and a little more of that...
but on the whole...the total volume is equal for all.

Those who have EARTH in excess...enjoy life to the fullest...
they ravish on the bounty of nature and are dreaded to hear of Death.....
These are called the `Sons of the Earth`.They are sensational. They have to see to believe. These kind of people are also having an attraction towards Fire.

Some have more WATER...in their constitution....these are the dreamers.....
they retract in their Shell of dreams..in times of adversity...blissfully ignoring reality...but these people have more "feel", charm and an insight...

Some have more AIR.... and literally so...these type people
strut around the globe with the grace of a peacock and the authority
of a Royal Lion....they have dreams too...and unlike their watery counterparts,
they strive to make theior airy dreams come true...but are rarely in touch with their innermost feelings and that of others too...
and they start believing that they are the hand that controls the chisel...
the carvers of their own destiny...but they are also the thinking type...

and Lastly..the FIRE..types...the Fiery ones....the ones with their intuition at its peak...they will not be bound to any man-made religion or order...
these people are born with zeal enthusiasm and determination
with a generous dose of jealously, anger, hatred and destructive
intentions......these are the ones who create small ripples in the pool of tranquility...
leading on to a Tsunami of fire which laps everthing and everyone in its stride....
.it does not rest till it reaches the bank...the bank of destruction,
devoid of noble intention...
The AFTERMATH......A zillion n one dead hopes dashed to pieces against the rocks....
dead long before the cliffs could cut them to shreds....burnt long ago in that fiery inferno....
dead past the magik cure of the country witches soothing salve...
stolen from the fire elves themselves....

Fellow-Human.....
this whole universe of ours is a dream a long-short dream...
long enough to bear grudges against our own kind...
short enough to pass by with the blink of an eye....
We all need to balance our ELEMENTS.....none more; none the less.
Its this perfect balance that makes this dream go on.....
the dream called life.... ELEMENTS in perfect Harmony...
couples in blissful matrimony.....no more heartache ; no agony....
no gold vaults..no stashed money....
no cursing stinging bees ...we steal their Honey....
the only logical solution...for them, you and for me!

© 2011 poetry-kiddo alienbaba


Author's Note

poetry-kiddo alienbaba
I hope I don't sound like I am preaching.....
not I ..no....I am just sharing a part of my existance with you...which is your birthright too..

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Your imagery is very good here. I love the line with the 'authority of a royal lion'. It's quite interesting that you use the basic natural elements to convey the message that we should accept each other and live our lives to the fullest. At least, this is what I got from it. It says, perhaps, that we should strip ourselves down to our basics and take away all the rubbish society has piled on us. Well done. My negative is the structure and grammar. I know poetry doesn't necessarily require grammar, but double exclamation marks are never acceptable. The structure also is a bit frayed - it does nothing to highlight your message, it just seems very random. Overall, though, good job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

Hi MoonA....i will listen to you and try to restructure my work....thank you for your lovely inputs:.. read more



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Keep sharing your existence love! It is such a potent source, your soul, the energy of willing your own balance as well as others is a blessing to us all.
The elements do make up us as creatures. I may breathe fire, there is fire in my passion, but my fire is what drives my water, my water flows abundantly giving my being to the air that carries my spirit across my Earth. And gives me all the intuition, all the instinct to be aware, to live as a child with the wisdom of ancient proportions...
This piece is a highly important one, I pray that others learn from it.
Great knowledge, well expressed and embraced by me, at the very least, Kiddo!

Posted 11 Years Ago


poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

i know she is :)
Priscilla Sayers

11 Years Ago

LOL!
poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

Honest
Some have more WATER...in their constitution....these are the dreamers.....
they retract in their Shell of dreams..in times of adversity...blissfully ignoring reality...but these people have more "feel", charm and an insight...


I would be water I guess :) This was fun, informative, I loved that line about not cursing the Bees when we steal their honey! That is so true for so many things!

Posted 11 Years Ago


poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

haha....u did reach there:)
come on in....the journey is long
poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

where r u now
So beautiful and in tune with nature and the elements. I loved it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

yes its an elemental journey shall we say:)
thx Cox
I had no idea what I was pulling up when I came to your page. It took only a few lines for me to become engrossed in this: speech? I know you have it classified as poetry, but to be honest, I'd call it a series genious thoughts. I couldn't help but to imagine Roman teachers standing before their young students across grassy hills. Cathedrals and monuments peaked at the distant horizon.

And the Philosopher speaks his wisdom.

I absolutely loved it. Really, one of my more favorite "poems" I've read so far.

--Christoph Poe

Posted 11 Years Ago


poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

Thank you Chris....
you are one of the few who will make a big impact on modern society and it.. read more
Christoph Poe

11 Years Ago

You are very welcome! It was a great and memorable piece. :)
poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

Bless
The imagery is great! You expressed your emotions wonderfully. :) Great poem!

-Invisible Girl! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


The Invisible Girl

11 Years Ago

I like fantastic four but that's not why its my username :)
poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

whatever the case may be...yer fantastic
The Invisible Girl

11 Years Ago

Thanks and so are you! :D
I love your imagery and the picture. Your wordage is well developed and really intensifies the poem. Great work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

thx mind...u r kind
Satan's Daughter

11 Years Ago

My pleasure
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AK
Greta poem! I love your theme:) you have expressed your emotions very well :) keep writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

thx AK nice to see ur comments on my pages...makes me write more:)
AK

11 Years Ago

:)
Thank you Ghost rain...I am happy you wrote what you did.
I am considering your words as good advice and re-checking my work:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Your imagery is very good here. I love the line with the 'authority of a royal lion'. It's quite interesting that you use the basic natural elements to convey the message that we should accept each other and live our lives to the fullest. At least, this is what I got from it. It says, perhaps, that we should strip ourselves down to our basics and take away all the rubbish society has piled on us. Well done. My negative is the structure and grammar. I know poetry doesn't necessarily require grammar, but double exclamation marks are never acceptable. The structure also is a bit frayed - it does nothing to highlight your message, it just seems very random. Overall, though, good job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

Hi MoonA....i will listen to you and try to restructure my work....thank you for your lovely inputs:.. read more
i confess, i am guilty of being the water person. clever analogy, i think. well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

lol...quinfinn its just a write...but i am glad ur identifying with certain aspects of it:) thx frie.. read more

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