SAKALLIM (In the morning)

A song I wrote and arranged the music. Sung by my friend Yogesh Kamat from Goa.

Sakallim -in the morning

Translation form the konkanni language lyric:

(this is my sung version...in my dialect)

Its Mornin! You wake up and go to the edge of the well....

Anklets on your ankles...

Your footsteps steps; like a Deers,

Your gait; like that of a Peahens.

Tossing your hair..your jet black hair over your neck,

My Heart yearns to talk to you,

And then....your Eyes gaze on my path,

Is that a flicker of a smile on your lips?

Your face is rosy like an Apple but oh so soft,

Please do look my way again and do cast a smile,

Thoughts have stopped weaving around in my mind,

I am dumbstruck,

My mind is soaring in the breeze;

My Heart is riding on the tides of your love...

Author's Note

A boy sees a girl walkin to the side of the village well to draw water in her pot...
her ankles clad in silver anklets,
she looks at him coyly but turns away,
he is fascinated by her gait and smile.

(will shoot a video soon....when I meet Yogesh and hopingly find a heroine...)

oh...the mp3 refuses to upload....pls check back again maybe in two or three days...its a beautiful song...i will embed here...

Reviews

[Hiroko]

A strangely Indian song. Did you gain inspiration from Indian music? Anyways you've done a lovely job! Great lyrics and a good tune :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yes it a fusion of Indian embellishment and western sequences:)

[Desert Dreamer]

Beautiful! I look forward to hearing this. Oddly, I found myself longing to live in a world where we had to walk to collect water...my world is too complicated in comparison...getting water from a tap seperates us from the natural world...oh, to find love while collecting water, that is a dream. :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

now the waters are polluted by septic leakages....but we r trying to fix them

[Poe Redd]

The words are beautifull! I love this!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

beacuse i think its a transliteration :)

[Tkess]

You can really feel the yearning and lustful attraction. Nice write.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

hey no lust here no way:)lololol

[Marie Harrison]

I can see this clearly this picture you've painted.
She's captivated his heart.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

very much so:)

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really soft and love the picture and like Princess LouLou said, it has a lovely flow!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yes Zelda i love this song no end too

[Princess LouLou]

Lovely flow to it. Wonderfully written.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Thx Princess its a nice thing to have u here with us

[TheElfPrincess]

A great poem with flow and emotion. Well done.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Thanks EP i like your words

[Cecelia]

The poetry of life appears to flow though you and onto the page capturing a moment in time beautifully....enjoyed

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

It really does :) thx Cece....i am a conduit