SAKALLIM (In the morning)

A song I wrote and arranged the music. Sung by my friend Yogesh Kamat from Goa.

Sakallim -in the morning

Translation form the konkanni language lyric:

(this is my sung version...in my dialect)

Its Mornin! You wake up and go to the edge of the well....

Anklets on your ankles...

Your footsteps steps; like a Deers,

Your gait; like that of a Peahens.

Tossing your hair..your jet black hair over your neck,

My Heart yearns to talk to you,

And then....your Eyes gaze on my path,

Is that a flicker of a smile on your lips?

Your face is rosy like an Apple but oh so soft,

Please do look my way again and do cast a smile,

Thoughts have stopped weaving around in my mind,

I am dumbstruck,

My mind is soaring in the breeze;

My Heart is riding on the tides of your love...

Author's Note

A boy sees a girl walkin to the side of the village well to draw water in her pot...
her ankles clad in silver anklets,
she looks at him coyly but turns away,
he is fascinated by her gait and smile.

(will shoot a video soon....when I meet Yogesh and hopingly find a heroine...)

oh...the mp3 refuses to upload....pls check back again maybe in two or three days...its a beautiful song...i will embed here...

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I'm smiling. This is so romantic!...and I love romance. Thank you for sharing your lovely write.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

i hope you can save the poem/song and download the mp3...cuz it might jus dissaper from the web...and it happens...lol error404 is so common now...thanks babe

[KAOlmsted]

Such a beautiful voice...Thanks so much for sharing this with us!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

thx so much....Yogesh is a prize winner in most competitions and he requested me to write something for him to his girl that never materialzes:)

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure. I can imagine he is, a prize winner. Just amazing.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

This song was sequenced i think more than 7 years ago..in Santa-Cruz...
yes and recorded at a diff studio...later..but i have lost the raw data....wanted to do a new version....am waiting to make a nice video...but the boy is shy to cootchie cuddle a heroine.

[KAOlmsted]

Awwww... sweet.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

lol...Yogesh kamat

[Bailey C. Writing]

What a lovely write :) Very good

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

thx glad u founds it nice:)

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

I'm no editor, but 'tides' is a much more appropriate word.
Fine writing!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

will do sir:) nice replacement i think too

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Glad to help!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

noted: thnx:)
cesspool swapped with tide

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

This is wonderful. I could feel the heart racing, the sweat of anticipation, the hope,,,
The only thing I would change is the word cesspool. In American English, a Cesspool is not pleasant.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

oh...i will find a synonym that is pleasant i hope John...can u suggest me one? i will gladly replace

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Very beautifully written. Great Write.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Thanks it was a sad happy song:)

[Desert Dreamer]

A beautiful song...I found it on Youtube and listened. :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Yes youtube makes a difference now:)

[Daytonight]

This was so very beautiful! Truly loved it.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

thx for ur kindness

[Pradnya]

hey its really nice, looking forward to your video

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

the main video will come when i finish with pending works:)