"Grow your own heart. / Soak it in gold."
I loved those two lines and just the idea of a heart being pure and beautiful when you nurture it yourself.
"Make your own soul. / Inhale bright blue."
Again, beautiful. The bright blue reminds me of a clear spring sky, something so innocent and just overall amazing to look at.
And, of course, the title says it all. Recreating oneself is hard to do, but you've provided a poetic and beautiful way of doing so. Great job! (:
Just the title got to me. The idea of being free to choose.. not tied down to perceptions and conceptions of others. Becoming something totally new. Powerful words you've shared!
I like the form or shape this took. You know if you change "Forget" in the fourth line of the second stanza to something like "Lose" it won't change the meaning of the line or it's context in the stanza-- yet by changing this one word the entire poem would take on a complete 4 by 4 effect. You know like four quatrains with four syllables each. I think that would be really cool. Anyway nice poem-- keep up the great work.
Wouldn't it be so wonderful if we could follow this poem as a set of rules for healing ones self.........because we would be free and able to fly.Beautifully written piece.
This is so beautiful. I love every word, every stanza, every line, every THING about this poem. The rhyming is just stunning and the concept makes it become a thing of amazement. I cant say how much I love this poem. It's simply, or not so simply, gorgeous.
You write with so many colors, that's something a lot of people don't do. I loved the emotions you use in this because they're subtle but they're pulsing in every word that you use. Beautiful write. :) Thank you for sharing.
Yummmmmmy color imagery(: I have to ask though, who is the 'they' in the last line?
And the first adn last stanzas are the best, in my opinion. I got this really trippy image of hands unwinding - that was pretty sweet. And the contrast between growing your heart and locking it away is so powerful, I love it.
This was...spectacular. :) I loved how simple this poem was, yet how evocative and deep the meaning behind each and every word was. The concept behind this piece was something that really resonated with me, particularly the second stanza. This was an absolutely beautiful write. Very nice,
~PaperHearts