The cool stream

The cool stream

 

 

Like watching a cool stream on a hot day,

running my finger through the water,

feeling it pass through my soul.

 

 

Hesitantly I dipped my fingers into your passion,

hoping this fire that burns deep within me,

would cool.

 

But the stream of your passion ignited the phoenix of love,

it consumes me from within.

 

It makes my tears flow,

my heart beat faster,

my body afire unable to quench the desire that will,

consume the animal within,

and set it hunting for you…its prey.

 

It will taste 'your' passion,

your soul,

YOUR LOVE.

 

It will never be satisfied,

so it will hunt each night,

and each night will show this beast,

other delicate treats to savor,

another part of you to taste.

 

Will you hunt with me this night,

and every night after?

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Interesting imagery -- bringing together tender and animal in one -- a nice mix.

[ron]

Thank you KL that means a lot to me.

[Matching Socks]

Oh for heaven's sake. It's Sunday morning.
How am I supposed to go to church now?
Feeling like this?

:)

(Loved it)

[ron]

Carefully ;)
I just write it. I didn't mean to get you in trouble at church ;)
Umm you could go to confessional...just saying, if it helps.

[ron]

Carefully ;)
I just write it. I didn't mean to get you in trouble at church ;)
Umm you could go to confessional...just saying, if it helps.

[Sami Khalil]

Your cool stream tames and soothes passions that are flaring...Excellent...:).........................

[ron]

Thank you Sami. You are very kind.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)................

[Vidya Bacchus]

I like this is is so passionate and has a wild feel to it and I like it wild lol

[ron]

Lol...thank you Vidya.
I guess I felt like a little "Hunting" today ;)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha duly noted.You are welcome :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

first line, second stanza...i read "your passion"

this one burns with animalistic pull, gravitating toward the idea of both hunting towards the fire within and without.

[ron]

Thank you Jacob. You are very kind. Love and desire can be like that.

[Frieda P]

You surpassed my expectations ron, like how you ran with this one, and that was fast! Not sure I want to be prey but it works! ;)

'your' passion

[ron]

-blushing- Thank you Freida, you are so very kind. I am honored by your words. xo

[Frieda P]

Your words are what did it....and my pleasure, a favorite! x

[ron]

blushing more