Separated

Separated

 

 

For just a moment,

feels like a life time.

 

Hours feel like days,

days seem like weeks,

weeks feel like months,

months into years...

years an unending torture.

 

The emotional highs and lows,

how much more can I take.

 

You said you would be back,

I thought I saw you for a second,

my bad,

it was just my emotions playing tricks on my eyes.

 

I feel like I am drowning in quicksand,

unable to get out,

every emotion takes me under.

 

Just put of reach,

you are a million miles away.

Reviews

[Konigin]

wow. I hope the person you wrote this about comes back soon. These emotions here drowned me... Great job Ron. :)

[ron]

I know she will. How did they drown you Chelsea?

[Konigin]

Good. :) I just.... drowned in them. They surrounded me, enveloped me. They were really deep.

[ron]

I know the kind your talking about Chelsea. They can do that, but someone will be in your heart and you will be in theirs to...I know it.

[Konigin]

:) Thanks Ron

[ron]

Your very welcome Chelsea.

[s y e]

You'll be fine Ron, you're strong and you have all of us to keep you company until your love comes back to you. :-) This was so sad and pulled at my heart.

[ron]

Thank you Sye. I didn't mean for it to make anyone feel sad.
it's jus that I felt alone, I know it's just me being silly.

[s y e]

You're not being silly, we all have those moments, Ron. Nothing to feel bad or silly about.

[ron]

Thank you Sye xo

[Eve Ola]

I can relate too. a good put though sad :(

[ron]

Thank you Eve. Yes it can be sad.

[Eve Ola]

em still stuck to your poem n these words
"Hours feel like days,
days seem like weeks,
weeks feel like months,
months into years...
years an unending torture."

like its just written for me

[ron]

WOW. Thank you Eve.

[Ambra Celeste]

The pain of being away from the one you love can really drown you. Emotionally written Ron. :))

[ron]

Thank you Ambra. Yes it can.

[ms. barrie]

Very poignant...a sea of distance in relationships, (lovers) over long periods
Of time, can create a hole of loneliness for the heart, a physical emptiness
Of longings.

Your poem, the imagery your words conveyed in this write...
Portrays that brilliantly, Ron. Very relatable and well structured.
Thank you for sharing! :))

[ron]

Thank you Barrier :)

[ms. barrie]

You welcome roner ;)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well Red distance is an insurmountable obstacle at times and you just have to bear it until you can be with the one you love yes?

[ron]

Thank you Vidya. Yes it can be. I have no other choice but with friends like you I will get through this xoxox

[Vidya Bacchus]

Compliments will get you everywhere lol.You are welcome :)

[ron]

:)........

[Stephen]

Hours feel like days,
days seem like weeks,
weeks feel like months,
months into years...
years an unending torture.

~~ Yeah, well penned ~~

This write`s a bit personal to you, I think so. You`ve dropped here not your words but the ocean of emotions indeed. I`m surprised to read this because as far as I know .. you write very tender pieces but this piece`s very emotional this time. Anyway, well written!

[ron]

Thank you. Most of my writing is personal, but this one was a lot more personal then most. Thank you so much for your kind words.