I cannot promise

I cannot promise

 

 

I cannot promise I will have hands as strong as steel,

nor as gentle as the rise of sun light.

 

I will not promise never hurt your heart,

nor be the man you deserve.

 

I cannot promise much,

nor catch a comet’s tail for you.

 

I have little to offer,

except my heart,

 

I am not a great lover,

the one from your dreams.

 

I am a simple man,

with simple needs.

Reviews

[Rose Black]

Simple things sometimes are all we need , like the smell of the first drops or rain on dry dirt, the soft sand inbetween your toes , walking had by hand with the one you love sometimes is all we ask for...

[ron]

Very poetically said Rose ;)- and thank you, yes sometimes it is.

[Rose Black]

Thankies =D

[Laura Harrison]

A simple yet wonderful poem. Beautifully penned.

[ron]

Thank you very much tj. You must be a hopeless romantic.

[Brianna Brie]

I love this one. "I cannot promise much, nor catch a comet’s tail for you." This line is a writer's dream. Also, the way you ended it is totally sexy. :)

[ron]

-blushing- Thank you Brianna.

[Hatchling]

Good work Ron! Thanks for sharing

[ron]

Thank you Fluttershy...:)

[Latifa]

well, at least your promise is genuine and real
good work here my friend.

[ron]

Thank you Latifa.

[s y e]

// I have little to offer,
except my heart, //

All she should need and be happy with is your love... You're a romantic, Ron. ;-)

[ron]

-blushing- you are to kind Sye.

[maria ( rose)]

Absolutely Beautiful!!! ♥ my favorite,, those last 3 stanzas.. ''WoW'' awesome Ron!!

[ron]

Thank you Maria.

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Aww, such a sweet and heartfelt write, Ron! Many women would love to hear this, I'm sure.

[ron]

Thank you. You are most kind.

[Lyn Anderson]

A lovely, romantic verse. A woman who is not too jaded would be thrilled.:)

[ron]

Thank you KL...:)

[Madalyn Beck]

This is beautiful. I would love to hear those words from my significant other one day. Just the acknowledgement that you will fail time to time, but you want this, want me. That's love in it's truest and most unadulterated form. Excellent work!
xoxo :)

[ron]

Thank you Madalyn. xoxo :)