Your walls

Your walls

 

 

Why do you put up walls,

that hide my love for you.

 

Would you cut your hair,

so I might never use it to climb your tower?

 

Would you stay in closed in your coffin,

after tasting the apple?

 

Would the prick on a spinning wheel,

send everyone in a slumber?

 

Let me climb your tower,

let me open your coffin,

let me heal the kingdom of your love.

 

I beg of you,

do not hide from my love so pure and true.

 

I would hunt the hunts man,

so your heart would stay safe.

 

I would vanquish the queen,

that tortured you because of your beauty.

 

I would call the forest,

to take up arms to fight your battle.

 

I would search the world over,

to find a grail worthy of you.

 

I would make a round table with knights so pure in love,

we would be your champions, but non more than I.

 

I would pull from the lake, Shan·gri�"la's own waters,

so that you would be forever young at heart.

 

Do not hide from my love for you.

For if you did, I would be no more than a shooting star.

 

A shooting star that has burned bright,

and no more life to give.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Lovely allusions and well done. One minor thing, I would likely put enclosed rather than in closed.

[ron]

Thank you KL. I will change it.

[ron]

Thank you KL. I will change it.

[Blue]

Ron, this is beautiful! I find it sweet when guys write about rescuing a damsel or chasing after a princess. I love the way you incorporated fairytale elements into this.

"Do not hide from my love for you.
For if you did, I would be no more than a shooting star."

Charming, sweet, and romantic write, Ron.

[ron]

Thank you Blue.

[ron]

Thank you Blue.

[maria ( rose)]

I admire your writing and your heart. Awesome read
-maria

[ron]

Thank you Maria.

[maria ( rose)]

your welcome!! keep up the great work :)

[ms. barrie]

Wow Ron, this left me breathless, I love the way you incorporated
Popular fairy tales and have put your own tender twist of poignant
Romantic longings in this gem of a poem!

The last two stanzas are my favorite...leaves a kiss upon one's heart.
Definitely favs this! Thank you for sharing :))

[ron]

Thank you Barrie. You are so very kind...:))

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome Ron...Thank you..So are you :) ~ xox

[Vidya Bacchus]

This I love. You have made yourself the prince in a girl's every fairytale .You have made me smile :)

[ron]

Thank you Vidya. Your review has made me smile as well.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well .....thank you then and you are welcome :)