Who we are

Who we are

 

Gunfire on the walls; shadows of past sins.

How the holes expose us all.

 

Hidden behind the ravages of time.

Would you look at me?

 

Could you stand the scares that hide who I am?

Would you hold me?

 

Bullet holes hide who we are.

Could you tell me who I am?

 

Could you at least tell me why?

Could you look in the faces of those who are here?

 

Could you tell them why?

Could you tell them why?

 

Do not beg for what is not possible.

Ask us what we can do.

 

Ask us and I will promise this…

We will rise up and take what is ours!!

Reviews

[Sarmelendez]

this is so raw and i love it, and this has true meaning.

[ron]

Thank you Sarah. You are most kind.

[Sami Khalil]

Ask us and I will promise this…

We will rise up and take what is ours!!

[ron]

Thank you for reading Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:).....................

[Lydia Shutter]

It takes courage to know oneself....to understand innermost fears and to comprehend fully that past problems do not mold who you will be in the future. While it is not possible to erase what has happened in the past, it is possible to move past it. Your words are empowering and oh so emotive. Excellent work. Lydi**

[ron]

Thank you Lydia.

[Laura Harrison]

This is perfect, there's nothing else I can say about it really :)

[ron]

Thank you adetailedflameofpurestj..That means a lot to me.

[Stevo The POE-t]

Thanks for sharing it... I enjoyed it... Great read...

[ron]

Thank you Stevo, coming from you that is a great honor.

[FlatLineBeauty]

Very deep and heart felt, Ron. It was lovely. ~hugs~ xo Winter

[ron]

thank you Rose. ~hugs~ xo

[Karen]

I like the way the poem seems to be connecting violence (gunfire, bullet holes) with self-revelation (past sins, scars to hide, "could you tell me who I am?"). It does seem very violent for one breaking out into a scary world that may misjudge and hurt again. And yet the ending is so uplifting as if to say despite these fears and violence, I can rise up and overcome! Very well written, Ron!

[ron]

Thank you Karen.

[Justsimplyjulia]

To be able to have seen what you saw, to experience what you experienced... one's soul can never be the same. i respect and am honored to have someone with such a history to be my friend of WC.
Great write.
-Dragon

[ron]

The honor is mine dragonheart.

[Ivory'lee]

Beautiful......... Is there more to be said ? I don't think so.

[ron]

More is said when two people discover each other.

[Ivory'lee]

Then there's not enough words to be said, they're only soft touches that mean more then words could ever mean......

[ron]

Wow that is so beautiful. That would make a great poem, Your challenge is to right a poem about it.

[Ivory'lee]

You are on!!! If I do you have to respond with one, deal??

[ron]

Ok deal....

[Ivory'lee]

Good, get started Mister.

[Cody Williams]

It does sound like a battle cry! Great work Ron! Thanks for sharing!

-CW

[ron]

Thank you Cody