Holding back five thousand

Holding back five thousand

 

I will be one of the one hundred and eighty five.

 

The walls breached. The one hundred and eighty five held five thousand at its wake.

 

Turn the tide of the battle, was the cry.

 

Hold them, hold them again and again. The walls held strong. Only their souls will tell.

 

Black as night it came. In the light, it cut them with its sword.

 

Don’t cry for me I held back five thousand, and I will hold back five thousand more.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[dw817]

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Walls breached can only be ... Starship Troopers ! *Grin*

No, I imagine there were other walls breached, let's see. Well, there was Bunker Hill, I think Hitler was protected by a wall, there was something about a wall of Jericho, and the Berlin Wall. Hmm ...

The wall held strong. I think that discounts all of them tho, even Starship Troopers as they were overrun by BUGS. Definitely very unfair odds for 185 to 5000. As Spock in Star Trek would say, I calculate the odds approximately 27.027 to 1. Not very good odds, captain.

[ron]

Lol. The poem was about the battle of the Alamo.

[dw817]

I definitely would not have known that. I failed history 3 times back in school, Social Studies were a nightmare, and it was a tremendous effort for me to pass American History in college. :)

[ron]

This one did come right and say it was the Alamo. It was ment to be vague to show the American spirit in remembrance of those who fought at the Alamo.

[dw817]

There was a girl named - Amanda - I think. She was doing puzzles in here like this for a-while. Who Am I ? What Am I ? I'm not sure what happened to her.

[ron]

Sounds intersting.

[dw817]

Yep, I just saw her on the feed-page a moment ago. She's there - just keeping quiet - that's fine. :)

[poetdoug]

Yes, I was born and raised in the shadow of the ALAMO in San Antonio Texas.
Thanks for the great respect shown. You are "right on "in every line my friend.

[ron]

Having not lived in Texas I delt as though I would not be qualified to write of the battle. Thank you for your kind words. It means a lot to me as you are from Texas,

[poetdoug]

You write it in the truest "Davy Crockett spirit". In fact, Davy Crockett is one of our distant family relatives. A fact of which I am most proud. Thanks again Ron.

[ron]

As well you should be proud of that. he was one of my heros growing up. I think the world needs another Davy Crokett to save us from our stupidity once again.

[poetdoug]

Boy, is that the truth. Keep on 'preachin' it brother! Thanks!

[Sheila Kline]

I note you have written this for the Battle of The Alamo.......BRAVO!! It was this group of courageous fighters who battled for and stood firm for this belief in what was in their heart and spirit! They did not back away!!
I like the "battle cry" tone of your poem!! Well done!!

[ron]

You are the first to know ut was the Alamo that i wrote about. Thank you I tried to do them justice.

[ron]

And if I had it in me I WOULD hold back five thousand again and agian till the day I die.

[Sheila Kline]

Good for you!! They were all so very brave!!!

[ron]

Some thing the poiticians should re-read. Im just saying.

[Sami Khalil]

"Turn the tide of the battle, was the cry.



Hold them, hold them again and again. The walls held strong. Only their souls will tell.



Black as night it came. In the light, it cut them with its sword."
The way I read this poem and I could be wrong is that you are describing some kind of battle between light and darkness... Light wins in the end...Brilliant...:)

[ron]

Thank you. It was the battle at the Alamo.

[Sami Khalil]

Good to know. You are welcome...:)

[Keith]

The sound of the battle cry. History has many cases of a few holding off against overwhelming odds, any one in particular here?

[ron]

Thank you. Yes this one was the battle at the Alamo.

[AnnaLeQuinn]

This was deep. Lovely wording and rhythm. So powerful and stoic. Perfect.
Anna

[ron]

Thank you. I wrote this one in memory of the 185 that defended the Alamo. Their spirit in standing agianst 5,000 is America's spirit in all the she stands for.