Beer is Proof

This is a kyrielle, a French form that Richard introduced me to. The kyrielle has a spiritual component to it, hence the beer. I was inspired by a Lagunitas beer truck.

Water in the vat waits for grain;

add some, soak it, mash wort, and strain.

Even though this mix is humble,

beer speaks volumes, people mumble.

Boil with hops, add yeast, and ferment;

make a liquid that's heaven sent!

In the vat I hear a rumble:

beer speaks volumes, people mumble.

Beer is proof of God's desire

for his people to feel higher;

still, we fall like cookies crumble.

Beer speaks volumes, people mumble.

Reviews

[Troy Henson]

How crafty this was right from the get go. Great visuals and so much fun to read. As a teenager when I first tasted a beer my father in law looked at me as I rushed a large sip, he said "Its an acquired taste and you need to learn to taste the drink not just drink the drink" This writing had me tasting the beer and appreciateing every drop.

[Roland Petrov]

Thanks, Troy! It may be an acquired taste, but there's alcohol in it, and that makes it all worthwhile.

[barleygirl]

I love how you got from that photo of the beer truck to your message in the poem. I love how you connect "spiritual" with "beer" . . . but most of all I love that your writing made me forget this was a kyrielle, a form I don't usually like becuz of the repeated lines. But you picked the right line to repeat & it came across well (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Roland Petrov]

Thanks, Barleygirl! I'm starting to get addicted to your hugs. In this age of Covid, even a virtual hug is a nice thing to get. A hug to you too, Margie.

[barleygirl]

You make me *smile*

[AJNJ]

I am literally dancing away to your words here. There is such spirit in these spirited words. Loved it!

[Roland Petrov]

Thanks! Your comment was moving. You really got into the spirit of it.

[AJNJ]

You're very welcome :)

[APOORVA]

how can u be so crisp and interesting...loved it
specially the feel from start to end in unmatched.
very well written

[Samuel Dickens]

I know nothing of poetry, but I like this recipe for the wondrous brew. A noble subject, for sure!

[wolfshrew]

The art of the brew filled through the words of a poet is something I didn't know I wanted to see till now, but I'm glad I found it. I mumble the most after a few.

[Roland Petrov]

Your witty comment made me laugh. Thanks!

[Woody]

hi Roland. sorry I haven't reviewed you for quite a while.
I very seldom know what I'm consuming so was surprised how much you know about God's brew. but of course you told it in your own funny way. proof of God's desire. that's a good one.

[Roland Petrov]

Good to see you around again! I'll have to see what you're up to these days.

[annalysiar]

Its creative and well put. Great write

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Writing poetry, for me, has always had a musicality to it. The cadence and rhythm almost naturally come to me. This poem epitomizes how the same is true in reading it. Because you set the cadence and rhythm within the prior quatrains, I automatically read de-si-re as three syllables rather than two, and I'm American. LOL!

Unfortunately, I don't drink beer, having been exposed to too many mumbling people who have had a wee bit too much.

[Roland Petrov]

Yes! Thank you! Looks like I can be a poet in America after all! I don't drink beer much anymore myself; wine is how classy people get wasted.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

LOL!

[Richard🖌]

How creatively sinful of you, Roland, to be so spiritual about the spirits of beer, and to drag God into it all with you … LOL!
I love it, and I love how spot-on you've made everything in this rather educationally enlightening romp of imbibing entertainment and hilarity.
Check V3L1 for count: desire is 2-syllables http://www.syllablecount.com/syllables/desire
Example: "Beer is sure proof of God's desire"

Again, your brilliant pen has taken-up the challenge, proving proud and worthy of your skills.
Great poeting, My Fine, Talented Friend; thanks for joining-in and for the honorable mention! Hm? I wonder what's next? ⁓ Richard


95/100

[Roland Petrov]

I thought about how desire might be only two syllables in the U.S.; in England, it's three. If read as two syllables, it won't be a match for higher, right? Shall have to think about this one. Hey, many many thanks for introducing me to something new again, and for your kind review. Maybe I should try another one of these on a more serious note before moving on.

[Richard🖌]

Listen closely:
Higher, fire, desire, inspire, fryer, etc; all have the same rhyme sounds … we live in the USA, so speak American English in your poems, especially when every other part is in it, and not more nonsense, and why do we care how it pronounced in Britain?
We're not in Britain, and we're not speaking or writing in the British dialect. LOL!

[Roland Petrov]

On a forum like this, I could be in Britain, and if you keep this up, I might move back! The way you guys pronounce desire in two syllables, it doesn't sound at all like fryer! At least you gave me a good laugh.

[Richard🖌]

No good laugh intended, but a good lesson was.
In the kitchen, I had the desire to be a fryer.
I think you pride yourself in being different, merely for the sake of being different, and enjoy giving me a hard time for trying to help you and seeing that you do right — the bad boy… ha-hahhhh!

[Roland Petrov]

Don't tell me that fryer is one syllable; that's the only way it could rhyme with a two syllable desire. I do understand that America has preserved old English, and that being from England I speak a more modern version of the language, but......oh dear, I forgot where I was going with this.

[Richard🖌]

Simply say the two words aloud; In Britain, "desire" is pronounced dee-zigh-uh (no "r" sound), as in Boston pronounciation, while in most of the US, it is dee-zire, and you know this by accessing any American English dictionary, and so why keep on with it? LOL!
It is the ending of the word that most often determines the rhyme, Roland, and the entirety of a word is not always necessary for a good rhyme.
Why do we have these senseless conversations … just correct your count, and let's move=on to the next fun and challenging form … sheesh! You drive me c R a Y z E e !!!