RUNAWAY STAR

NONE WHATSOEVER.

                                                         RUNAWAY STAR

In the winter murk,

Along the turf,

standing alone,

Unheard and unharmed,

looking at the starry sky,

with infinite possibilities,

I see a shooting star,

Burning with ardor,

Desolate and driven,

That astronomical marvel,

With it's majestic tail,

Made a sudden trail,

So near yet so far,

Moments later,

It was gone,

Unheard and unharmed.

Author's Note

One of the random stuff.

Reviews

[Kotite]

I really like the parallels between you and the star and how when it comes down to it we're here and gone in a flash; or in your case, there and gone in a flash. I didn't see any of the recent reviews touch on the fact that you used the same line to describe your coming there to the star appearing so I just thought I'd note that and give ya some credit ^.^

[Ramya]

A simple theme so beautifully written. Nice choice of words.

Love these lines:
"...burning with ardor, desolate and driven"

Renders a classic visual aspect in just over a few lines; great job!

[Mai L Nissen]

Lovely poem with beautiful imagery. The parallel is subtle and not fleshed out too much, I like that...
"standing alone,
Unheard and unharmed,"

"Moments later,
It was gone,
Unheard and unharmed."

A little thing though, I would change 'was' to 'is' as the rest of the poem is in present tense.

Enjoyed reading it :)

[Chandler bing]

Thank you so much I will totally look into it :)

[Jamestown]

Great piece of work, really love the subject! Shooting stars and all of our vast
sky is gorgeous, well written piece and creates awesome image in one's mind!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Gurleen Saluja]

Shooting stars, lovely they are. Well used adjectives and the favourite part... so near yet so far. Well done :)

[Chandler bing]

thank you so much!

[Gurleen Saluja]

You're welcome

[I Am Svetlana]

Shooting stars are such stunning sights! I've never seen one, but I know they are rare.

[Chandler bing]

I have seen them 2 twice they are awesome...

[Chandler bing]

Now I realise I have written 2 two times s**t my bad..

[I Am Svetlana]

Haha, no worries.

[dan]

Chandler, This is a very nicely written piece, sparse yet still fraught with power. You have a very nice style. I am going to accept your friend request and mark your page so I can review some of your work. Thank you for sending me a friend request, I'm honored to accept. take care...riki

[B.J]

That was brilliant..Well done

[kite kid]

i wonder what inspired you to write this piece if its just " random stuff". to me this poem can connect to people thoughts of oneself to the over populated world around us that makes wish upon being a star ourselves. but great work. hopefully i can see what you were thinking before writing this poem, to me this stands out from the rest of your poems.

thanks you.

[Chandler bing]

Hey yo everyone has their own opinion and i totally respect you for yours but it's random and you saying otherwise won't make any diff.
Thank you

[Moonlight]

The kind of poem that wants the reader to read on an on! Captivating! It's a nice read.:)

[Yam]

Engaging......Truly Captivating!!