Watching Porn-1(REVISED)

Experiences of boy who is in his early teen and is surrounded by religious fanatics with "watching porn"

                                                         Watching Porn

Last night I did something brash,

and this time I couldn't give it a pass,

My libido was slovenly flowing through,

I knew this moment of manic would be rued,

I cursed my conscience called it an imbecile pervert,

but that incongruous tension wouldn't just divert,

My fingers trembled as I made the move,

And my eyes rolled around whilst I wouldn't be screwed.

Now I had entered the lair of seductresses,

For I was Incognito so I left no traces,

Making a choice now seemed so absurd,

Everything is ominous I murmured.

That unsavory stuff did lend me,

Some sparse moments of serenity,

But the ruefulness had already started,

Now it would be hard to carve it.

 

This would be a little secret to myself I thought,

Hoping it won't turn into an addiction I sobbed, 

Watching porn is no big deal I grumbled,

Everyone does it then why should I be troubled?

 

Author's Note

Frankly speaking many of us share a love-hate relationship with porn.I don't know whether it is good or bad but what I do know is that for some it is an ominous necessary. This for the "some of us".

Reviews

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

I really liked this one. I love how you encompassed the shame that religious people make young teens feel. To me, watching porn, is better then going out and sleeping with diffrent people and catching some sort of disease. If "bible thumpers", as I like to call them, would open their eyes and see it the logical way, teens wouldn't feel shame.
Don't get me wrong, I'm a christian. I fully believe there is a God, but I also believe he's more willing to forgive you pleasuring yourself, than being promiscus...

[The Nude Writer]

True topic for many people I know. I hate telling someone to rework a poem.. but you should either rhyme or not. Starting and stopping really throws the reader off. and kills the flow of the poem. Other than that.. fantastic write!

[Chandler bing]

S**t I totally killed this one now it's a mess! I would do it right tomorrow right now I am too tired and sleepy anyways thank you.

[The Nude Writer]

Hehe :) No worries. I think you have a fantastic idea here and great word choice. Just needs work on the flow :)

[Chandler bing]

How is it now?

[The Nude Writer]

Much better :)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Nice poem about the conflict between society saying watching porn is wrong and the conflict between expectations and desires! The lines "Watching porn is no big deal I mumbled,
Everyone does it why should I be troubled?" were particularly ingenious, though the "I mumbled" seems superfluous and doesn't entirely fit in with the poem.

Nice word choices you made!

[Chandler bing]

thank you for your review :) and yes I would look to it but right now I am feeling sleepy so my brain is half working ...anyways thanks again for helping me out.

[Chandler bing]

I have revised it what about now?