I was once a hardworking man.

I was once a hardworking man

I was once a hardworking man,
It wasn't too long ago,
When I did all sorts of thing at one go,
But now I feel meagre and exhausted,
Not wanting to face my present,
I remembered my past.

Past

I used to cut wood from the trees,
And sell them in a nearby street,
I also worked in a paper mill,
Earning my way through hefty bills,
After slogging all day,
I would hike back all the way.

In the morning,
Rejuvenated from yesterday's batter,
I would get ready for today's battle,
Again slogging all the day,
I would hike all the way.

In the morning,
When the dawn would break over,
I would find my self in a clover,
Satisfied with my life as it was,
I would pray to god.

Reviews

[Georgina Cross]

This poem is very beautifully structured and i love the rhythm the selected rhyme creates throughout. Perhaps could have been more balanced in description but overall the imagery it created is compelling.

Today is my first say on writers cafe, and i was wondering if you could perhaps review my first piece on here?
Once again, beautiful poem!

[Heather]

wow! this is great! i love how appealing this poem is and to me it reminds me of poems you hear as a child, the ones you never forget!! i think it is the rhythm, the pace. it brings back my childhood from when i was little little as i'm only 15. I love your vivid imagery, it welcome the reader, and the story behind it, great job!! :D

[Sarai Lee]

I feel like this poem could go on! Perhaps, there is more to write? This piece gives me an image of an older man who is retired now, and reflecting on the hard work he's done throughout his life. I can picture him sitting there in contemplation of the hard earned calluses on his hands, and feeling satisfied once just to work. I really enjoyed this image, but I feel like it needs an end! Regardless, this is very well written!

[Chandler bing]

Thank you! I guess in a few days I would continue this one .

[sakshi arora]

it was engrossing nd full of sense i just wish u to add few more lines i loved this piece

[Chandler bing]

yeah i know someone else also told me it was incomplete anyways thanks for reviewing..

[sakshi arora]

ur welcome

[Prritiy]

story of content man who with time if loses contentment then the work seems unpleasant drudgery.

nicely written.

best wishes

[Chandler bing]

thank u so much maam..i hope u continue reading my poems n give ur wise opinion:)

[Prritiy]

you are welcome :)

[kublakhan27]

Reads like a kind of ode to the proverbial Everyman. I was happy to read the sense of contentment in the final stanza. It's like an individual proclaiming pride in his work, and is undaunted by whether or not anyone else notices. Very nicely done.

[Chandler bing]

didn't expect anyone would notice thanks man you made my day :)

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :)

[Ronnie]

A really nice, I could picture the hard working man.

[Chandler bing]

thanks for being so appreciative about my work :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was a good read. Thank you for sharing your well written poem. xo Winter

[Chandler bing]

thank you sister :)

[Avinash]

Stagnation my friend is what diseases the soul , so keep looking for things which challenge you and make you grow.

[Chandler bing]

Yeah I know it does indeed thank you sir :)