Where did you go?

Where did you go?

A Poem by The Seeker of Thoughts
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A poem to someone I miss.

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Where did you go?
We used to talk everyday.
You used to come watch sports I played.
Whatever happened to our good old days?
You never text or call anymore.
You left out of nowhere.
Is it something I can change?
Your name has been shunned, nobody says it.
Please just call me, i'm not mad.
Answer me please? 
Where are you dad?

© 2017 The Seeker of Thoughts


Author's Note

The Seeker of Thoughts
I never really talk about my father, but it has been bothering me lately. Please be as critical as you feel needed. All opinions are welcome and wanted.

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Life without father. I had a AWOl father and I learn later why. Push away because of his race and the wars he had fought in. He and I became great friend till his death. Sometimes we must offer love and friendship. I liked the poem. Hard for young people to understand why parent become cold and distance. Thank you for sharing your words and your thoughts. You left something for the reader to think about.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mirror

7 Years Ago

Exactly, Coyote. The poem was a good one.



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This is such a touching poem. I pray you find the peace you so richly deserve. Dads are precious and their presence will always be missed. Great poem!

Posted 7 Years Ago


The Seeker of Thoughts

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and the concern. I am glad you liked reading it.
AYVID N

7 Years Ago

You are most welcome...
Any man can be a father. Real Dad's are rare though.

Posted 7 Years Ago


The Seeker of Thoughts

7 Years Ago

This is true. Thank you for the kind words.
You tell this sad tale in a poem with the truth revealed to the reader at the end, thus allowing the construct of any interpretation according to each individuals thinking. You strike a poignant note and the poem flows well. Only thing I am not certain about is the phrase 'You left out of nowhere' which I feel could be couched better?

Posted 7 Years Ago


The Seeker of Thoughts

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and your opinion on it.
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

That line chucked me a bit too.
The Seeker of Thoughts

7 Years Ago

I see what you mean and I moved it somewhere better thank you for the opinions.
Aww... I almost thought it was a lover. C'mon. These is strong emotions. Well done. I does sound as though you miss him. or perhaps, he is taboo named. "Your name has been shunned, nobody says it..." Yet, you miss him. it is sad but lovely

Posted 7 Years Ago


The Seeker of Thoughts

7 Years Ago

I do miss him in all truthfulness. Thank you for reading. Perhaps I will show it to him someday.
My friend,we all host a subject in our lives that we rarely speak of. Often times it's not the subject itself that's hurts so but, the energy it takes to resolve it. Some have more subjects than others to resolve. I'm sorry this response is so long, I feel the need to comfort you. It's ok to pour yourself out. Pouring out the hurt will allow fresh joys to be poured in.

Posted 7 Years Ago


The Seeker of Thoughts

7 Years Ago

Dwayne, my friend. Thank you for the kind words and the concern. It means a lot knowing people care... read more
Dwayne J. Keeves

7 Years Ago

Indeed. My heart aches for all God's people.
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For me is always hard to be critical cause my poems are not perfect. I like this idea idea also form of poem looks like some short note from diary. So it's make more realistic . There is deep worry and wondering about person. I like it lot. Sorry I was not critical.

Posted 7 Years Ago


The Seeker of Thoughts

7 Years Ago

Don't worry about it my friend. All opinions are welcome and wanted when it comes to my writing.
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7 Years Ago

Good same with my writing take care and have nice day
Life without father. I had a AWOl father and I learn later why. Push away because of his race and the wars he had fought in. He and I became great friend till his death. Sometimes we must offer love and friendship. I liked the poem. Hard for young people to understand why parent become cold and distance. Thank you for sharing your words and your thoughts. You left something for the reader to think about.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mirror

7 Years Ago

Exactly, Coyote. The poem was a good one.

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