Just Go With it

Just Go with It

(Original)

 

 

Sometimes I wish that I could stop time,
To open my eyes and for everything to be fine,
For no problems anywhere near,
To not live in fear.

To have not a care,
And for once take a dare,
That’s how it should be once in a while,
To take a risk but not run the 100 miles.

We all wish that’s how it could be,
But if only others could see,
That’s life, yep that’s it,
So don’t have a fit.

Just go with it

Reviews

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A conversational piece that still maintains rhythm and readability - a pleasure to read! I think all readers can identify with the speaker when they read this poem, and I think all readers feel this way many times in their lives. It's a good poem, one that everyone can relate to, and it's easy to understand. Simple diction that solidifies the message, easy to read, with good flow.

Keep writing! :)

NOTE: I just reread this while going through some of the old reviews I've given, and I just now realized that the structure of your poem resembles that of an arrow, pointing down...I'm not sure if it was deliberate or not, but it certainly fits the message of the poem - to let gravity do its job and to just "go with it." :D

-Mina