My Deepest Slumber

The agony of not being able to sleep at times because of my school papers and projects and reaching their deadlines!

I only see her twice a week, 

she wears a dress as long as the river.

Lined shirts and cardigan sweaters that

slightly blocks the cold. 

Her heart for everyone to see.

Firmly, slowly gracing the paper, a dirty 

pen tells of her past.

Tears with the scent of deception, an aroma 

rather discomforting. 

Today I saw you again.

You smiled so bright, like the rays of the sun 

shining through my window warming up my heart

reminding me to feel alive,

Your voice so angelic it refreshed my soul

like a splash of fresh water early in the morning

awakening me to feel alive. 

But I don’t.

And now I lay here searching for you, my deepest slumber..

I wish to see you again.

Comeback to me please, 

I long to bask in your depth.

But I don’t.

Edgar Perez.

Author's Note

Aloha, enjoy (:

Reviews

[Edgar Perez]

My dear friend, I love your quill, you just know how to perfectly discribe the love for a woman.

I love the perfect appeal of the love you feel, for this woman,
but also as fear, to feel the real underlaying feelings, (the you) and
the divested, there is nothing more beautiful than a heart, that is real,
even though it is in denial ... you have a knack for good poetry, because it has
to have many true life facts, and contradictions in it.
So so well done my friend.

- Elisa

[Edgar Perez]

You have a smooth way of making me smile when i read all your words.
It's like you choose each line so heartfelt.
Seriously, if it weren't for your positive reviews and encouraging words; I would have given up! Thank you, Elisa

Aweee, it's you my friend, from who the review comes out of my hands, into this keypad... you write, I reflect your beauty xo

[Edgar Perez]

See! you see what i mean!? smiles galore! (: lol

*smiling*.............. :) lol

[Edgar Perez]

Aw Grand! me too! my brother just walked by and said " why are you smiling at your laptop?" ahahaha. Thanks! totes made my night (:

Aw, saludos a su hermano, y le deseamos buena suerte en su viaje..... :)))

[Edgar Perez]

Muchas Gracias dice mi hermano! Y saludos desde Hawaii! (:

Es un viaje largo, la esperanza todo va siempre tan bien, mi amigo nos ponemos al día de mañana, debe ir tenemos una diferencia de tiempo tan grande .... mahalo amigo, besos desde aqui, a mañana! adios!

[Ruth]

This suffocates and I can feel the tension but there is such beauty in the imagery here, very cleverly voiced! :)

[Edgar Perez]

Poppy! Thank you! I am glad this was heartfelt; again thank you.
I hope your day is of par excellence.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:).......

[Edgar Perez]

Thank you dearly, Sami. your review is greatly appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...Any time...:)................

[sweetred]

i LOVE!!!! this its so beautiful and deep i love the words you chose it was so beautiful all i can say is that i wish to see more

[Edgar Perez]

Thank you so much, Sweetred! dearly treasuring your words! (:

[Lydia Shutter]

What a wonderful love poem. No cliches, just honest emotion and desire. The way you described her, I could almost see her with her skirts "as long as the river"....splendid imagery! A very special write. Lydi**

[Edgar Perez]

Lydia! (: Thank you dearly!

[Pryde Foltz]

Wow….

Now that's a love poem. You expressed deep feeling with not the slightest drop of saccharin. I am cheering you on my friend, cheering you on.

[Edgar Perez]

Pryde! Thank you so much! your review means a lot! glad it was heartfelt! (: