Secrets

How to secure a secret.

Shush! Don't tell anyone.......
As if that request is ever done.
You tell me once
I'll tell it twice
I can't keep a secret
To save my life.
I'll tell you one thing that's for sure
If you want your secrets to remain secure
Then tell them at night upon your bed and
When you awake they are safe in your head.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

I like the premise of this one, I also agree with John's suggestions. Sometimes he knows his stuff. ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I would have done this slightly differently:
Shush! Don't tell anyone.......
As if that request is ever done.
You tell me once
I'll tell it twice
I can't keep a secret
To save my life.
I'll tell you one thing that's for sure
If you want your secrets to remain secure
Then tell them at night upon your bed and
When you awake they are safe in your head.

[Robin]

Thank you so much. I love your tweaks. It makes the piece flow better.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

One of the arts of writing is crafting. Working a piece like wood. Plaining down smooth before applying varnish. Glad you are happy with my suggestions.