MOUNTAIN

I wrote this for someone who is no longer with us.

Snow capped

Cloud wrapped

Lone trail

Lost grail

High crest

Bright quest

White breath

Black death.

Reviews

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Rather cryptic but I like it.

You paint an image of someone good and pure who stands tall, someone with integrity.
But they have had darkness fall upon them.

I don't know, that's just my interpretation.
Could just be a plummet from the summit...

Enjoyed reading it.

[Marie]

Thanks CHerry. It's only a poem about a mountain.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

You're welcome.

[Roxie M]

Aww, sorry for your loss. Well rhymed and descriptive of mountains in our lives..

[Marie]

Thank you. But I have never lost anyone on a mountain. I just know that it can happen.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Well done as always... I agree, great rhyming scheme.

[Marie]

Thanks. This rhyme scheme is challenging, but fun to do.

[Rita L. Sev]

Love the rhyme here, Marie - perfectly chosen words to draw your image.

[Marie]

Thanks, Rita.

[Divya]

Very beautiful. You are a gud nature poet. Last 2 lines are my fav.

[Marie]

Thanks. The last lines are always supposed to be the best; they are the point of the poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, lost grail----seems tempting until we get halfway through the quest, and run out of breath, and life.


such impact.

[Shreya Das]

wow! Just to the point yet says so many things! great job!

[Marie]

Thank you.

[Patrick]

i think it's my privilege to review this first - I find it captivating and tragic.

[Marie]

You are the first to review this, and so far the only one. Thanks.