What a beautiful poem, Marie. I could see this framed in a lovely golden frame with a delicate line of lapis. I guess I thought of framing bec I just bought an illuminated manuscript which I' need to frame. Anyway, this truly is a lovely piece -- it's simplicity is just elegant. Thank you for sharing it.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thanks. But I feel this poem is too harsh for something as delicate as gold.
Hey I was going to pick out one of your stories to review after you had reviewed "Jeramy" but I enjoyed them all and couldn't provided any feedback except that. Then I found this. This is one I could read over and over and let my imagination run into something new each time. Excellent. Glad you posted this.
Nonnye
Marie I posted a poem titled "Soft summer night" just a while back. Mine was a lot longer than yours, but yours says more with half as many words and I like it twice as much. The bold black typeface and font adds a good touch also. It's like most of your comments: short and to the point!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Mine is not better than yours, just different. You describe the softness of a summer night, while I .. read moreMine is not better than yours, just different. You describe the softness of a summer night, while I describe its harshness.
When I see à red sky its almost predictable that it will be raining soon . Its amazing that they give us warning signs . or heads up in the coming days .
I have been writing for almost 60 years. Writers' Cafe is the best writing site I've found. If you send me read requests, expect me to be blunt. I don't like poor grammar, misspelled words or mistake.. more..