From Home, With Love

A little something for Heather, and something for you guys to enjoy after a (sadly) long hiatus.

I'm coming home today,

Although I'm already there,

Where is home, anyway?

Can you take me there?

Because I'm lost,

I'm alone in the cold,

Covered in frost,

Slowly growing old,

But when you are here,

I feel young again,

And it makes me fear,

I'll lose you, and then,

I'll lose everything,

Because I know,

Without you, there is nothing,

And it just goes to show,

That we love each other,

More than anything,

(Although you hate my brother)

And it is like magic when you sing,

There is a lot to say,

But I'm coming home sweet dove,

And I hope there's a way, 

To send from home, with love.

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

Loved that aside about the brother. It makes us realise that with her, there is no other. And even with conflicting relationships & quite possibly conflicted interests, we work it out because that is what true love is & does. I'm sure Heather loved this. Quite a lovey-dovey poem. Light but meaningful. Deep but fresh. And of course, loaded with personal meaning that would be lost to the casual reader. Thanks for sharing.

[daydreamer]

It's a very good poem but in my opinion you can do without the line "(Although you hate my bother)". To me it takes away from the beauty of the poem. As a female reader that line almost seems resentful to the person that poem is about. So if you took that one line out because it doesn't fit with anything in that poem it would be a very poem.

[Robby DeLuca]

It wasn't meant to be, but thanks for your opinion. The purpose of that line though was kind of an inside joke between myself and Heather. Sorry if it confuses you, but I put that in there to make her laugh, but I'll keep your feedback in mind. Thanks.

[Indie Skreet]

Sweet poem of young love, nicely worded and always good to throw in a line for a laugh :)