Time Was

“Time was, ...”

How simple that preface. 

A tentative opening to personal perspective and self-earned revelation. 

Then there follows the pause, a moment of seasoned reconsideration. 

Those that go on, adding historical lore, prove they haven’t finished their lessons. 

Those that stop, letting those two words hang expectant...

Travel with hallowed memory and refrain from Future’s hype and narcissistic claims. 

Author's Note

I was going to write a longer piece, but paused and decided to construct the impression this way first...critiques and comments welcome.

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

"Time was," like 'there was a time....' when it all became clear, but something else becomes less clear, a moment to step back and retrace our steps; and move on to the next saga in an epic adventure tale, or leave without burden of clarification. The challenge it seems is to honour the memory and forego the bloated projections and self serving entitlements. This is such a capstone from which many other stones find a point of anchor and foundation. Thanks for sharing.

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
First ever read of yours..
My gut feeling is there is much more hidden behind your lines...Not that it needs to be any longer...
Possibly words with deeper meaning? or, different punctuation? But then again what do I know...
You did say critics are welcome so I am doing just that...
I do love the idea as a whole...
Lisa, now in Spain

[roarke]

Thank you Lisa for your read and comments. I’m not a poet, and I usually use prose to develop my fiction writing, but you are absolutely correct, I too think better/deeper words are required for this concept. And I will revisit this piece many times. Thank you.

[Lisasview]

I had a feeling you were a writer when I read your words.. Interesting to use prose to develop your work...Hmm...
If you have a chance you might like to read a couple of mine.
For example: Tender, Mothers letter or Hand~In ~Hand... Just picking out a few...I have several posted.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Writergurl]

love that last line, I had to really focus on this write, font is really small... LOL
But i did enjoy this piece.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Intriguing, this is a great lead-in to something bigger.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

as S&G sang..."time it was and what a time it was, a time of innocence, a time of confidences"

bit now "there are no times left, just the NY Times"
and they may talk of how "time was"
I had long talks with my father about "time was" but the man had accomplished so much...seems I am getting into old age now, and am trying to reconcile with all I didn't do and some of what I did.
I love this piece, it speaks to me on so many levels.
j.

[roarke]

Thanks J I don’t know if I’ve written exactly what I’m getting at, but I’m all around it. I think you’ve added more, thanks.

[Poetic Beauty]

Memories and new thoughts sometimes a good mixture and sometimes they hold us back

[roarke]

Thanks for the read PB, I think you’re right.

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. Glad to see you are still walking these halls writing

[Delmar Cooper]

I don't know if there is such a thing as a "rhetorical statement." I might Google it, but if there is such a thing, "Time was..." complete with the ellipsis would be an example. This under your category of those that stop. All the others, the un-stoppered majority are just garrulous old b******s like me. I think you did well to stop when you did. Plenty of time for a long piece tomorrow.

[roarke]

Most assuredly DC, and maybe even further down the road before approaching this again. Thanks for the read and impressions.