Letting It Go By Chrsitopher Ross Livingstone

Letting go in a process of grief

Letting It Go By Chrsitopher Ross Livingstone 

More than a week since has passed 

September gave way to October.

Feeling the air as the chapters turned

Here I am in sensation 

Feeling on as I am in reflecion

Calling back 

Sensitive to sensations gone past

Where I was on this day last year?

Remembering the touch and go

In hope prays we had your flame a little longer

Holding a hand that nurchred mine from infant to adulthood

No way in preparation can you be prepared

What a year?

Changes echoe on 

Learning to live on

My heart feels on 

Nature blesses and teaches

As she does I surrender 

Letting it go 

On this day the rain in my tears

Falling leaves

So must my thoughts 

These are the days 

from time gone by as letting it go 

surrendering from a space of pain

Where an an eternal flame burns 

Reviews

[A Decent Playwright]

Evocative.

Some of your lines don't make complete sense and there are some misspelled words (nurchred should be nurtured, echoe should be echo, reflecion should be reflection), but the overall energy communicates what it means to, and the emotions are all there.

My favorite line is "Here I am in sensation." That's such a succinct way to say it. We are trapped in our own bodies, and thus in our own feelings. Sensation is normally such a distant, scientific term for a feeling, but phrasing it here as something you can be "in," literally surrounded and permeated by, almost drowning, works so well. Typically "love" is the only emotion we describe being "in," but this line comes across as somebody so wracked with grief they have no other way to describe it. There are a few times in life we have all been trapped in sensation. (That said, I would have personally found it more effective if you had not used the word "sensation" again three lines down - just my opinion though).

[Christopher Ross Livingstone]

Thank you for your feedback...I'll use this going forward and make some ammends.