Come Back to Me

a heavily revised re-post, heavily irregular rhyme scheme...enjoy

The gap had widened gradually,

the light was gone from sea-green eyes;

The nights out with ‘friends’

again and again,

lasting till the hint of the coming sunrise.

A question was answered, evasive and vague,

a whiff of cologne, “Oh a guy bumped into me.”

First one night, then two

that you didn’t come home…

I knew right then that it was now only me.

 

Before the new week, while I was at work

you came and you picked up all of your clothes;

Your keys on the counter top,

your laptop was gone;

I gazed out the window, the moon just a sliver…

I pictured my life sinking into a river

of white water…to drown, I suppose.

 

I took one more job to keep up with the rent,

my car stereo became my friend and my curse.

Every song that was played brought my mind back to you…

Each day I would grumble, “For better or worse…?”

My thirst for you, here every night, in my chair

my folder of poems on my lap,

the gap that had started this chasm back then

had grown into solitude, a pine with no sap.

I saw you the other day, hailing a cab

and looking so happy, so very content.

I went to our restaurant…and ate with my dreams,

remembering the times that we went.

A thought that had crossed through my mind

like the wind

a dare to myself to reclaim self-esteem;

And I wished to myself, “Please let healing begin,”

and let all emotion roll back and unwind.

 

So a year from that day that my world came undone…

I prayed, “Come back to me,” one final thread

that I sewed on to a shirt I then threw away

and looked at the hopeful bright sunrise instead.

 

dan © 2016

 

Music: “Watching the Wheels,” by John Lennon

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[AquaWater5674]

Mezmerizing...Did you ever hear that saying..."Be Careful What You Wish For"....
I could feel the angst and the longing and the remembering...
You are..an amazing writer...

[Kaylee April]

I like the nostalgia of this. btw i love the song you put to it and how it adds to the back and forth energy.

[dan]

Thank you Kaylee. Even though the piece is fictional I found myself saddened as I was writing it. Lennon's "Watching the Wheels" describes to me the feeling of looking back and wondering if things had been different. take care...dan

[stargirl23]

"the gap had widened gradually" really stands out.. i liked this!

[dan]

Thank you Adi, I appreciate you taking time for the read/review. I love getting feedback. take care...dan

[Nisreen]

being in one place yet feeling this disconnection
and somehow it feels like everyday the distance is just getting bigger

the voice of this sensitive man
with all his heart on the line

it reads like the softest words ever written

[dan]

Thank you Nisreen for your highly complimentary review. This was a fictional write inspired by various happenstances in my long life. I always appreciate your feedback, thanks again! take care...dan

[Nisreen]

not complimenting
it is really what i think

[dan]

I know, but when you said, "it reads like the softest words ever written," I took that as a huge compliment...a GOOD thing. Thanks again. take care...dan

[RJ]

This is so tragic :( but really well written

[dan]

Dear AWTAAH, Thank you so much for your read/review. I would love to review your work to return the favor. Could you friend me then send me read requests? That's the most efficient way I can handle the influx of new friends/writers/poets/friends...again. Thanks again. take care...dan

[RJ]

nah my writing isnt that good and my other profile has most of my work

[dan]

Your writing is probably much better than you give yourself credit for. I'd be very happy to read it. take care...dan

[RJ]

Remember the profile Dannys Goddess?

[dan]

No, are you Ruby? Danny the Outcast is a friend of mine. dan

[RJ]

Yeah. It's me and Danny in my profile pic

[Insight "MH"]

I went to our restaurant…and ate with my dreams,

remembering the times that we went.

A thought that had crossed through my mind

like the wind

This part is magnificent, dreams happen sometimes to let us have what we cannot have in reality, and dreams move swiftly afar like the passing wind.

[dan]

Insight, Thanks so much for your kind words. I always appreciate your insightful and informed reviews. When one is dumped right onto one's heart, dreams can cushion the fall. take care...dan

[Insight "MH"]

You are mostly welcome.

[J Manuel]

Ah, the affliction love brings into the soul accompanied by a write such as this solidifies the importance of trying to keep this powerful emotion at bay, yet, it always somehow manages to sneak in unexpectedly. “a whiff of cologne, “Oh a guy bumped into me”, I’ve been here before and have asked the same questions. Your depiction of heartache is lined up with perfect illustration and imagery but more than anything, I enjoyed how the end played out “and looked at the hopeful bright sunrise instead”. Excellent

[dan]

Thank you J. I believe that there are millions upon millions of people who have similar stories to tell. Bad news breakups happen all of the time, but I believe that when cheating is the root cause it makes it considerably more painful. I appreciate your read/review, and I am headed over to your page to return the favor. take care...dan

[J Manuel]

Thank you...dan

[Antoñyo]

Very heartfelt piece of work that captures the effect love can have on some as opposed to others. Few things in life we put our 'all' into leave our 'everything' as easily.

Thanks for sharing!

[dan]

Antonyo, Thanks so much for your read/review. Love can take one to the highest highs and the lowest lows. And a breakup such as the one described can leave some nasty scars...or enlightenment. Thanks again. take care...dan

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Love the song with your words because it is so fitting!
Your last stanza says so much about the whole.

[dan]

Josie, Thank you so much for your read/review. I like to try and find music that's compatible with the messages I try to impart. I appreciate your kind words. take care...dan

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!

[Ruth]

When life turns in a way that leaves us surrendered to its waves, it leaves us hollow in many ways...how to deal with such an aftermath - not always plain sailing...especially when the sap has dried up and dreams are the only company...poignant Dan, blessings...

[dan]

Thank you Poppy, your interpretation and comments are very profound. This is fiction, by the way; I went through a divorce years ago but it was nothing like this. I'm always appreciative of your reviews, thanks again! take care...dan