So Says Me

Cosmic title? A write that is both dark and adrift. I've masked my true colors to be able to paint the emotions with wide color palette. I hope you like it!...dan

I am writing this to register a

Pompous confession.

How life requests my intellect

To say or stumble not.

               The upward inclination of so,

               So many flighty dreams…

               You know, they end before conclusions

               Bleed away.

The end of this litany, awkward as it is

Can illustrate more than I say.

A picture means a lot more than a

Shadow of a sight, a wish to blow

The jagged winds away

 

dan © 2016

 

 

Music: “New Lines on Love, “ by Sniff ‘n’ the Tears.

Author's Note

Reviews

[.]

This is just fantastic work!

It appears to refer to the art of writing a poem.
Referring to how the writers intellect can sometimes be made redundant in the writing of a poem. Poet's can think up "so many flighty dreams" yet they are unfinished or incomplete ideas.
Sometimes we write poems, get three quarters of the way through and get stuck trying to write an ending.
That is my understanding of this piece, anyway.
Thought provoking, as always, Dan.

[dan]

A really perceptive read, Doodley. I've been struggling a bit with writer's block recently, so this was written to depict the struggle; banging brain cells together in hopeless effort, still being unable to finish one idea completely. Thanks again for the great review. take care...dan

[Nisreen]

I see in this poem
this life pushing one to engage in thought all the time
while sometimes maybe we dont wish to do so
maybe hoping to drift off a little
dream

i love it

[dan]

I like your take on this write, you hit the nail on the head. Thanks for stopping by and leaving a great review. take care...dan

[BLitZeD]

So many flighty dreams…

You know, they end before conclusions

Bleed away.

was my favorite part. i like this one a lot. A+ buddy good job.

[dan]

Dreams are the ready platform for so much of poetry that is written. Ideas can end before any conclusions are drawn, which leaves one feeling robbed of their just due. Damn dreams! Thanks for stopping by and reviewing. take care...dan

[JayceeC]

I wish life would request my intellect. Then maybe it would quit hibernating and shake of the brain fog. Sadly when ight wakes up, it nixes all or dreams one at a time with rational thought and logic...So maybe it should keep its request to itself after. Great write, Dan
Ps- Love to Dee as always!

[dan]

This started out as a doodle...just writing words for practice(?) Suddenly I noticed a thought taking shape, my little exercise turned into a viable (if a bit jaded) poetry form. Not my best but better than nothing, I supposed; so I posted it hoping someone would like it. I appreciate your read/review, and Dee says hello and thank you. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your poetry always unravels itself like a mystery, the further down the page the reader goes. You have the ability to snare one's attention that way...well done, Dan!

[dan]

Some of my earliest drafts unravel like lunacy. I sort of consciously try to include an impactful word or phrase to kick-start a piece. Thank you so much for your kind words. Always a pleasure to hear from you, thanks again. take care...dan

[Riddhi]

Great work...I really enjoyed it and you are among those writers who make people enchanted by your poems..I liked your use of words...Very well written and keep on writing and thanks for sharing..

[dan]

riddhi, Thank you so very much for your kind words. It is a nice thought that my words leave people enchanted, if only that were really true. Thanks so much for the compliment. take care...dan

[zaisham9393]

Very well written my friend.
I loved it !!
Thanks for sharing my dear friend dan :).

[dan]

Thank you, Zaisha, always a pleasure to hear from you. Thank you for the kind read/review. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

I always enjoy the way you make me think with your words. Love the way you worded this write and the creativity you use my friend. Seems like every night I am chasing conclusions in my dreams searching for meaning. Great piece Dan :)

[dan]

Sometimes I write a piece, like this one, then look at it when done and think, "How did I come up with this idea, this piece of a story?" So even when done my writes make ME think. Thanks as always for your kind words, Aaron. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

I know exactly what you mean Dan. When I look back on some of my writes I think to myself "where the hell did this come from?" We let that creative part of our mind take over and splurge onto paper our thoughts :)

[dan]

"Splurge onto paper our thoughts?" I like that...can I quote you? take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

Feel free to my friend :)

[Willard Wells]

Dreams that I am aware of, come seldom for me. Yet I don't know why. My mind active as you seem to indicate trying to find the way. Sorting out between shadows in the dreams with the reality in the day of light. Repeating over and over, hoping to find the truth of reality.

Sorry for the disjointed review. I see to be lost in the thoughts you wrote as I search............ Well done.

[dan]

The write itself is more than a bit disjointed; my latest pieces I've done seem to lean more in the direction of abstraction lately. I'm expecting reviews to read, "What?????" I appreciate the read/review very much! take care...dan

[Willard Wells]

I find myself writing as you say disjointed. It sounds like someone coming in at the middle of a conversation and there a back story that is really only known to the writer.

[dan]

Well put, thank you for that...dan

[...]

Ending before conclusion is not such a bad thing, Dan, for what is concluded is done, and you, sir, are far from that. Lucky for me, cuz I get to keep coming back to this never ending luxury of your poetic alchemy...and I so enjoy my visits :)

[dan]

Thank you, lynn, though I'm now afraid that none of my ball caps will fit my big head! I appreciate your kind words so very, very much. And you also get 50 bonus points for using alchemy correctly in a sentence. 8^) take care...dan