I'm getting to this one a little late, Dan, but yes we can all feel these words.
Nicely orchestrated work, and ever so simple.
Love it Dan, good job.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
A little bit of social commentary in haiku form. Thanks so much for your kind words in review. take .. read moreA little bit of social commentary in haiku form. Thanks so much for your kind words in review. take care...dan
I still feel so bad for all French citizens fighting through their fears. Much like Americans had to.. read moreI still feel so bad for all French citizens fighting through their fears. Much like Americans had to recover from the effects of 9/11. Thank you for your review. take care...dan
This says it all about what happened in France. I imagine the following night being exactly like this. Quiet, with a heavy sense of horror in the air of what has happened, and of what is yet to come.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
You're probably a little to young to remember that aftermath of 9/11, but that mass murder on live T.. read moreYou're probably a little to young to remember that aftermath of 9/11, but that mass murder on live TV cast a pall over every US citizen. Disbelief, confusion, thoughts consumed. I remember that feeling well and I imagine the French people are feeling it too. Unbelievable tragedy. Thanks so much for the thoughtful review. take care...dan
9 Years Ago
I was actually 7 at the time and remember that day very well. I was at school and my teacher kept th.. read moreI was actually 7 at the time and remember that day very well. I was at school and my teacher kept the tv on the whole day. I was surprised we stayed for the whole day. My parents glued to the tv with fear when I got home. True that is probably exactly how France was that day.
Short but beautiful. I like the message and the way you used the music. This song fits your haiku well.
-Kay
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thanks so much, Kaylee, haven't heard from you in awhile! Please send me read requests so I can retu.. read moreThanks so much, Kaylee, haven't heard from you in awhile! Please send me read requests so I can return the favor...I'm headed for your page now. take care...dan
Nicely, tastefully done Dan. More power to your pen my friend.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you, ANTO, I appreciate the visit and review. Always nice to hear from you, friend. take care... read moreThank you, ANTO, I appreciate the visit and review. Always nice to hear from you, friend. take care...dan
This worked well for me in your choice of style. I found the music to be distracting, but when turning it off or extremely low, and reading and rereading your haiku I found the rhythm. That being said, the words spoke volumes... simple. direct. powerful. I enjoy direct meaning in its simplest form. Nice job Dan. Long time no hear...
Peace, Todd
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I'm thinking of changing my musical accompaniment; I liked the one I chose because it depicted an ai.. read moreI'm thinking of changing my musical accompaniment; I liked the one I chose because it depicted an air of terrorism, the world's enemy at this point. Thank you for your review anyway, I think I will change the music or do away with it entirely. Thanks so much, Todd. take care...dan
9 Years Ago
Todd, I did change the music to "Breaking the Habit," by Linkin Park. I hope that you like it better.. read moreTodd, I did change the music to "Breaking the Habit," by Linkin Park. I hope that you like it better now. take care...dan
The darkness is more noticeable for the light that once shown. Do you think they are looking up at the sky and noticing that the stars are still there? Sometimes I feel like we are living in Old Testament times, but God did prevail in the end. May he always do so through the work of his people
I'm sure God has a plan but I don't know if circumstances will allow all involved to decipher it. Fr.. read moreI'm sure God has a plan but I don't know if circumstances will allow all involved to decipher it. France is now going through its own 9/11; they were standing with us then and we desperately need to stand with them now. Thank you for your review, Jan. take care...dan
9 Years Ago
I totally agree with that, and I think it needs to be more than just lip service. "Whatever it take.. read moreI totally agree with that, and I think it needs to be more than just lip service. "Whatever it takes, if that's what it takes."
When will it ever end? God himself is bowing his head, I am sure...
Wonderful work, Dan!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you Kelly. If God has a solution I hope that it is enacted soon. I always appreciate your feed.. read moreThank you Kelly. If God has a solution I hope that it is enacted soon. I always appreciate your feedback, thanks so much. take care...dan
Let the people stand, unite, and say WE"VE HAD ENOUGH!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I'm with you 100%, lynn. Something drastic needs to occur to put a stop to the destruction of our wo.. read moreI'm with you 100%, lynn. Something drastic needs to occur to put a stop to the destruction of our world one incident at a time. Thanks so much for your feedback! take care...dan
that's a perfect way to sum up the atrocities happening in many locations around the globe--not just france, the tragedies that people face day in, day out, the nightmares they feel and undergo in the dark of the night.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Nadia, Thank you so much for recognizing the message I tried to impart. Way too much darkness coveri.. read moreNadia, Thank you so much for recognizing the message I tried to impart. Way too much darkness covering the light in the world. take care...dan
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