The Fog (haiku)

Fog, in thought...in snippets of sound

The sounds of the fog

Curl around another bay

In water’s deep sleep.

 

dan © 2015

 

Music: “Claire de Lune,” by Claude Debussy

Author's Note

Reviews

[-Scribe in Style-]

Hey Dan! My friend, I feel like I should have been first on this page to comment! Sorry I've been away - Anyways.. Congratulations on your first Haiku! I'm glad you stepped outside your element to try something new. Really proud of that.

It is beautifully penned - I must say the imagery and meaning are very deep and well conveyed through your selection of words. Thanks for sharing and keep it up!
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[dan]

SiS, Thank you so much, but I really feel as if I took a very small step; in fact I just posted another about the awful terrorist attacks in France. Hopefully a better penned haiku? Thank you for your encouragement! take care...dan

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I never thought of fog that way before...that it had a sound. But it does...it's more silent, more mystical, more ambient...quiet but reverberating. Thank you for this wonderful poesy!

[dan]

Nadia, This was my first attempt at a haiku, wasn't sure if I was in the right church, let alone the right pew. Your delicious review gave me a lift, thank you so much. take care...dan

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

It's a stupendous first attempt! Keep writing :).

[dan]

Thank you, Nadia. It's always a pleasure to hear from you. Please send me read requests for your writing. It may take me awhile but I will DEFINITELY review it!! take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I actually felt the refreshing chill of winter. What a jem!

[dan]

Crystal, Thanks for your kind words. This is my first attempt at a haiku so I'm a bit out of my league. I appreciate your feedback. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

Dan, I love your Haiku! ...was this your first attempt at writing one? Very impressive.

And the extraordinary visualization of Debussy's classic gave me another nudge to learn how to play piano!

My best to you, my friend!

[dan]

Yes it was. I felt like I was out of my element, that someone was going to say, "Hey, you can't do that!" You get yourself a keyboard (not the one you typed this with), ever an electric piano, they're less expensive than those Grand pianos. Thank you so much for the great review, nice hearing from you. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

I can't believe this was your first attempt! ...wow!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

one of the most classic instrumentals....
and such beautiful words from you...the silent sound of the fog...but there is a certain music to it.

[dan]

Add to the music of the fog the lonesome bellow of a ship's foghorn...thank you for the great review, jacob. take care...dan