hybrid chatter

endless, talk too damn much...you just want to yell, "shut up!"...

hybrid chatter

 

voices cut and loudly clatter

               through the maze of

chatter present…incessant.

               a strange human talks…AT ME…

while walking, bent…why should this

               matter?

the noise crashes my past,

               clashes with alone time…

my only own time;

               now it really shatters!

sane forgiveness, lifeless

               business rambling past

familiar home…begging for a voice

               award…while sighting the

door I walk toward.

               chatter masks its VIOLENT clatter…

door slams closed;

               the porch light

splatters…home is

               my own alone…

no chatter.

 

dan © 2015

 

 

Music: "Thunder Clatter," by Wild Cub

              

Author's Note

Reviews

[MelissaAndres]

I spend a lot of time alone as I no longer work outside the home but I do understand that chatter, chatter, chatter! When I am around a lot of people it can seem so magnified to me because of that alone time. Loved this piece and love the song! Good job!

[dan]

Thanks so much, Melissa. I went to your page to check out your writing, returning the favor and such. But there's a problem. Due to my disabilities (Bipolar and Anxiety Disorders, among others) I can't focus or concentrate on long writes. I get frustrated and anxious, and angry at myself; not conducive to focus or concentration. I'm sorry that I won't be able to absorb your writing enough to do an acceptable review. Thank you for reading my piece. take care...dan

[MelissaAndres]

Oh, not a problem at all. I do have some shorter poems if you would like to check those out but it's not necessary at all. I completely understand!

[dan]

Melissa, If you would like to send me a friend request I will accept it. Then you can go to your poems and send me read requests. I will review ANY poem sent to me by ANY FRIEND, ANYTIME. Thanks for you mentioning your poetry. take care...dan

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Dan. It's not necessary to read. I don't want to force my writings on anyone but I will send a friend request. I appreciate your kindness.

[dan]

Please send me read requests. It's not FORCING me, I can delete them if I want to, but I DO want to read your poetry. So please do send them, it's how I keep up with my friends' writing; I've got too many friends and not enough time to keep up, OK? Thank you and take care...dan

[MelissaAndres]

Okay, I will do. If they are too long don't worry about it.

[dan]

Sounds good, have a great night...dan

[MelissaAndres]

I did send you a Reader Request. Did you receive it?

[dan]

I may not have gotten to it yet. I've been out of the loop for the past month or more due to my wife's hospitalizations and my own severe leg pain and weakness. In the past three days I've done tons of reviews, I'm sure I will get to yours in the next few. Thanks for sending it! take care...dan

[MelissaAndres]

I am sorry about all your troubles, Dan. I hope things get better for you soon. And, please forgive me. I am pretty new here and had never sent a Reader Request before. I wasn't sure I did it correctly. Thank you for responding.

[dan]

Oh, don't worry about my 'problems.' Dee and I will get better, we're tough. And also don't worry about your 'newness' here. You have to start at the beginning. Everyone here is nice. Send out many friend requests, they will all be considered and most accepted. You'll catch on quickly, and you DID send the RR just fine, I received it and responded with a good review. You'll like it here on WC, a nice "family" will be formed with you and your most frequently read and reviewed friends. Enjoy! take care...dan

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Dan. I wish you and your wife the best.

[dan]

Well I just sent YOU a read request, a sort of confessional-style poem with few boundaries. I hope yo will give it a read? Thanks...dan

[MelissaAndres]

Thank you, Dan. I definitely will.

[Isabel]

I have definitely experienced my share of the white noise. There are times where people talk mindlessly, so much is going on and all you want to do is have silence soothe you and have things be calm for a second. Overall your piece was great! Nice work.

[dan]

Thanks so much, Maria. This idea sprang from visiting my wife in the hospital for a month. All the machines, docs and nurses voices, instructions, rules to follow...I had to leave quickly several times due to my anxiety disorder. I love people, but I also love being alone with a book or mindless TV shows...this allows my mind to spread its wings. Thanks again for the read/review. take care...dan

[TheOne&Only]

Loved this piece!! Its so deep, kind of dark and edgy I think...I also loved the flow to it. :) You have a very interesting mind btw....I like that!

[dan]

Thanks so much, coming from you who writes wonderfully your review humbles me. My mind is OK but sometimes it rolls over on its back, like our cat. Thanks also for the complimentary words. take care...dan

[Insight "MH"]

Sitting alone is a quality time that i enjoy, cause silence makes me think of every important thing that i am distracted from, especially, my thoughts which are caged when i am in a noisy place.

Thank you for your lovely write.


Insight

[dan]

Thank you Insight. You encapsulated the essence of the piece perfectly. Thank you for such an insightful read and review. But then again, your name spells your actions and review mode. take care...dan

[Insight "MH"]

The pleasure is mine.

[JayceeC]

It does make you wonder why people are so afraid of the quiet. Are they afraid to think, less they realize that not ever choice made was perfect? So they fill the air with senseless sounds and nothing of importance. Why do they never worry about the infringement of others' rights to silence?
I truly like people, but this inane chatter makes me a bit crazy and after a bit, I hibernate in my room with a good book and silence. Doors close and nobody comes in. I call it decompression, everyone else calls it anti-social tendencies, but it's not. I can have intelligent two-way conversations for hours and days and I'm fine, but a night of "socializing" with the world as a whole, and I'm done for a bit.
How's Dee doing?
Jan

[dan]

Jan, Dee is actually doing very well, still recovering from her broken shoulder, but on the mend and in very good and feisty spirits. I actually got the idea for this piece when she was in the hospital and every time I went there I was tripping over white noise and chaos. When she was being discharged I was talked at by docs, nurses...technicians about aftercare, appointments...ENOUGH! We got home and all the noise we heard was our bird Tucker hysterically hollering, announcing that his Mummy had come home. Thanks again, so much, for you caring words and support as she was fighting health demons. I consider you a friend, Jan. You could shoot me a little update on Otto if you are so inclined. take care...dan

[JayceeC]

I'll send you more on him next week. we go to the ankle specialist to discuss and schedule surgery three as soon as he can possibly get through the recovery without regression with his knees. We go Tuesday, so more update then.
I'm glad Dee is doing well. I do know the white noise of hospitals, and they make me angry when they talk to me like I'm a small child or idiot! It's always a relief to come home!!!!

BTW- I really liked the structure of this. It's clean and minimalistic, but easy to follow your thoughts and hear the sounds.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"home is where the quiet is"

it does get awfully tough when people just talk at us...no conversation, just an agenda of their own, that often has nothing to do with us, and doesn't interest us at all...

White Noise.

[dan]

White noise. I was actually going to end the piece with that, changed my mind. You hit the nail on the head, though. I got the idea about 3 weeks ago, my wife was hospitalized and docs, nurses and technicians were all talking about aftercare, future appointment, blah blah blah.... My head hurt. The feeling spilled out in a Word document. Thank you for your insightful review. take care...dan

[1VJ]

Love this, although I do enjoy the busyness of chaos, the quiet of my mind begs for meaningless trouble.

[dan]

Paloma, I actually had this idea percolating for three weeks or so. My wife was hospitalized and I was getting all this information from docs and nurses about aftercare, future appointments etc. Plus the natural maelstrom of voluminous noise a hospital seems to pride itself on...chatter, clatter. Thank you for the nice review. take care...dan

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i had to move away from the chatter and clatter of busy city streets, barely escaping with my sanity in tact...nowadays i find myself with lots of solitude and am only bothered, sometimes, by the voices in my head, which i never acknowledge - i think many of them have splattered near the porch light...many of us long for peace and quiet, my friend...enjoyed this piece very much...good to see you have not lost your touch...cheers, FT

[dan]

Thomas, (just a minute ago I learned your name from noticing another person's review of Sultrysoul's work) May I call you that now?? Thank you for your understanding and insightful review. I've been thinking about this one for weeks...it came from the constant echo of voices and mottled chatter I experienced in the hospital when visiting my wife; stored up angst has time to age and ripen. Thanks again for your support! take care...dan

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yes you can, dan...you are welcome, my friend...i understand the need to escape the noise :)